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Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2004-10-25 08:18 PM

I am not this man
lying in bed
filled with food
reading a book

I am the other one
standing on the shore
of a yet invisible sea

beneath the light
of sun, stars,
snowy autumn moon,

where from a distance
not so terribly far
someone I love
is calling me home

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2004-10-25 08:23 PM

This brought tears to my eyes.

It's a tender hell to be in that place, John.

Damn.

You really ARE a lovely poet.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-10-25 08:39 PM

a beautiful piece

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2004-10-25 09:10 PM

I have written this theme many times, yet
I feel I have failed to come close to what
this poem leaves with me in so few words.

Excellent images within it, well done.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-10-25 09:33 PM

Huan Yi

So many of us are more than one...I know I am. Excellent write!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2004-10-26 07:46 PM

Irresistibly nice...James

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2004-10-26 07:50 PM

my favorite write of yours, so far
tender, heartfelt

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

7 posted 2004-10-27 01:58 AM

this is touching....

bittersweet and beautiful

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

8 posted 2004-10-27 07:23 AM

heart wrenching visuals...

very well done!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

9 posted 2004-10-27 07:57 AM

nicely done.. very nicely done

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

10 posted 2004-10-27 09:21 AM

Hell...this makes me want to call you home!!

I loved this!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

11 posted 2004-10-27 10:35 AM

~ and home is where the "other man" belongs. Heed the call, Dear Poet.

Beautiful in its simplicity.

Love & Light ~ Hearth & Home,
EA

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

12 posted 2004-10-29 05:17 AM

Tender, aching, painful, beautiful... just plain lovely. You say so much with so few words. Not sure how you do it...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2004-10-29 05:36 AM

lovely

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

14 posted 2007-05-15 12:20 PM

crying for the freedom,,tell me why???

enjoyed

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