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Huan Yi
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0 posted 10-25-2004 08:18 PM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Huan Yi



I am not this man
lying in bed
filled with food
reading a book

I am the other one
standing on the shore
of a yet invisible sea

beneath the light
of sun, stars,
snowy autumn moon,

where from a distance
not so terribly far
someone I love
is calling me home


© Copyright 2004 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-25-2004 08:23 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

This brought tears to my eyes.

It's a tender hell to be in that place, John.

Damn.

You really ARE a lovely poet.
passing shadows
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2 posted 10-25-2004 08:39 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

a beautiful piece
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3 posted 10-25-2004 09:10 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

I have written this theme many times,  yet
I feel I have failed to come close to what
this poem leaves with me in so few words.

Excellent images within it,  well done.
Martie
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4 posted 10-25-2004 09:33 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Huan Yi

So many of us are more than one...I know I am.  Excellent write!
JamesMichael
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5 posted 10-26-2004 07:46 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Irresistibly nice...James
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6 posted 10-26-2004 07:50 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

my favorite write of yours, so far
tender, heartfelt
muted
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7 posted 10-27-2004 01:58 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

this is touching....

bittersweet and beautiful
LeeJ
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heart wrenching visuals...

very well done!
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nicely done.. very nicely done
Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 10-27-2004 09:21 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Hell...this makes me want to call you home!!

I loved this!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Earth Angel
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~ and home is where the "other man" belongs. Heed the call, Dear Poet.

Beautiful in its simplicity.

Love & Light ~ Hearth & Home,
EA
GG
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12 posted 10-29-2004 05:17 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

Tender, aching, painful, beautiful... just plain lovely. You say so much with so few words. Not sure how you do it...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Dark Angel
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lovely

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Drauntz
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crying for the freedom,,tell me why???

enjoyed
 
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