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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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Lush, humane self pity Nightingale’s slight pretension Plays with my mind Harrowing tender mercies I can see your promises under glass Accepting the assault as retribution for philanthropy Catapulting triumphs, long sunny afternoons Tibetan fingers adrift in co-evolution Not to undo what gushed from your tongue Intimately ripping fabric beyond shame Like stretch marks that don’t believe Accepting drinks from a maker of substance Forgetting the pill, behind closed bars Out on the street after dark With hands held out, asking “Have you ever given money away?” You answer with that lustful wolf’s head smile ‘Willingly!” Loosing pieces of myself and personal integrity Thinking life’s purpose as a family business Bizarre! I opened the door and fear stepped in! You knew my alarm of heights! But, you still signed the guest book with a bogus name? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow LeeJ, the imagery..sigh. it's a  Mxx and I am haunted |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write Lee!  Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
WOW Lee...superbly painted pictures you have given us of this poem. still a bogus name, huh..20 lashes outta be about right. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Lee I read some comments earlier and someone said the poet are on a roll. This must make you taking out the valleys, trees and re-adjusting mountains. I do acknowledge as we all do that there is an organised mechanism here for promoting friends to be in the top 25, but can I suggest you be a little more subtle when you work on lowering talent out of those 25. The poem on Butterfly should give you a clue. Dave |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
This wasn't you LeeJ This was, I felt a moderator pumping friends poems earlier and your poem with the quality and it's low level rammed down to me that we write on quality not who we know. Dave |
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