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Silence Becomes This Stillness (Masquerade Challenge)
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Silence Becomes This Stillness (Masquerade Challenge) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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I walk these meadows recall lily scents and snow falls of yesterday.... My gaze turns towards heaven {silence becomes this stillness} Shadows embrace this noir of night visions of you remain dancing my thoughts The aroma of lovers musk lingers here a moment of passion entwining souls captured in moments hold I still tremble unshakable memories and I am left with this ache of you.... {a meager attempt to do this poet justice....} The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
At first, I saw Susie in some of the words you chose. But, I think you were looking at things through green eyes for this |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
lol...thanks Ed, but we will wait to see what others say but just so you know...lol... my eyes are green, honest.....!! lol... The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i am right there with Ed's choices.... ...i think miss greeneyes is this mask  beautiful work here |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well, then, your mere attempt has been more then succesful...well done my friend...very much enjoyed.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh yes and you portrayed her beautifully Donna. I do believe this is our own Greeneyes/Lauren. Excellent....extremely well done! ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How very beautifully done ... and yes I guess the indications above are probably right ....I love her too! Love, Margherita |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I think I might know this one... Well done Donna! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am seeing Sunshine in this  a lot. Beautifully you met this challenge. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
the form looks like Lauren, but the voice sounds like Kari, either way it is a beautiful write and an honor to the poet. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh Donna...that's what you get for trying to wear two masks at once! LOL...definitively Greeneyes... This is wonderful, m'dear. So many are rising so well to meet Wranx' challenge... and wouldn't you know, my muse went off to its own party! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A hint of Littlewing and Greeneyes I pressume  and I am haunted |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Am I seeing Sunshine? LOL, I can see at least three in this one, we have so many ladies who write love so well! Stylistcally, I see more of Greeneyes or even Littlewings, maybe even Martie in theme after the second read. Whoever it is, your wrote a fine piece! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
lol...thank you all for your guesses, but I'm not giving it up as to who just yet... lets see what the consensus is....LOL!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Either Soleil or Greeneyes....sort of a tossup....undecided...but very nicely done, way to go Donna!! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I too thought Sunshine - but then again, I can see the green eyes - either way, simply lovely - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Greeneyes for sure! If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
i thought sue at first but see greeneyes, lauren, in this a little more |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
oh wow lady, I'd be honored if....but see Martie- and Sue in this...beautiful  ~~*~~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is Lauren, it has to be, I do not write that well LOL, c'mon Donna fess up. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ah Suzie, you forget I have dueted with you and YOU DO write this well.....but nope, it isn't you.........grinz...but I am truly honored that anyone would think that I could write like you!! The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
well, I read it again, and have settled in on Greeneyes.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ok....I give, yes I was ATTEMPTING to do our very own Lauren, and thank you all for playing along... L~ forgive me dear for trying to wear your shoes for a little bit?  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
forgive? its lovely! and thank you Donna....you brought many a sweet memory back with these words....luv you! ~~*~~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
My thanks to all again. Capturing the grace and essence of this gal is a challenge indeed! L~ thank you so very much for allowing me this honor and it pleases me sooo much to know that you approve and enjoyed! Your all great!  THANK YOU!!The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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