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babygirlwlove
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0 posted 2004-11-09 02:02 PM


Love,
not enough
and coming too late
to a delinquent sorrow,
your hands that would
at last be gentle
as the subtle fluid
of some black heart,
seeps less black,
less innocent of night,
my voice subdued,
no less gentle, hands
harshly held
at arms length
to strengthen
the quiet bliss,
apt to the ignorance
you've kept me in, to let
a soul take wing
and to bring, in love
that which by whose
syntax we find, to join
our bodies
      to our minds.

2004 copyright babygirLPress

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

[This message has been edited by babygirlwlove (11-09-2004 06:43 PM).]

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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-11-09 02:04 PM


no less gentle, hands
held harshly held
at arms length to strengthen
the quiet bliss,
apt to the ignorance
you've kept me in, to let
a soul take wing


oh YES!  I love the way you write...
well done BBG.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-11-09 02:11 PM


absolutely beautiful and delightful read
everytime I click on you, it's better then the one before...your a flowering artist right up there with the Masters.


babygirlwlove
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3 posted 2004-11-09 02:16 PM


thank you both!

love&light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

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4 posted 2004-11-09 04:09 PM


your hands that would
at last be gentle
as the subtle fluid
of some black heart,
seeps less black,

These lines have special meaning for me... I like this very much!

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5 posted 2004-11-09 04:12 PM


quote:
hands
held harshly held
at arms length to strengthen
the quiet bliss
  

Know that feeling but to me it "sucked" LOL, all or nothing Gemini reporting for love here.

Beoootyful lady.

Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2004-11-09 06:07 PM


is it ever too late?

I know at times it feels that way, but doubt it in truth....

nicely done ma'am.. as usual, it layers voices and imagery well..

babygirlwlove
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7 posted 2004-11-09 06:46 PM


thank you all for stopping in on my lunacy...it is greatly appreciated...

and chief~
your words always still me into thought, love...thank you...

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Aenimal
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8 posted 2004-11-09 10:46 PM


eew the L word..

nice writing bgirl, this one says everything that needs to be said. nice tight package..um... i was still talking about the poem lest i get something thrown at me

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2004-11-09 10:50 PM


This reminded me, for some reason, of thoughts at a potter's wheel...

and don't ask me why, but that is what came to mind, perhaps it's the silkiness of the feel of it, and the potency of becoming.

lovely tho (and yep, I'm weird)

still reading you babygirl

enjoyed

passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2004-11-10 05:24 AM


cool write...I always enjoy reading yours
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
11 posted 2004-11-10 05:34 AM


hands
harshly held
at arms length
to strengthen
the quiet bliss,


yes~~  agree with you

M

babygirlwlove
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12 posted 2004-11-10 08:09 AM


thank you all for stopping in on this...

Raph~nice tight package(the feeling is mutual)...about your poetry, of course...BTW...speaking of tight packages...still have thatuniform...although I got booted from the catholic school...**LMAO**

Serenity~ thanks for staying with me...

love & light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

wranx
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13 posted 2004-11-10 10:56 PM


Hmmm, sounds like you might have gotten snuck up on while wearing your wistful

Nice, nice, nice...


Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
14 posted 2004-11-10 11:17 PM


two words..photo evidence lol
babygirlwlove
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15 posted 2004-11-11 07:18 AM


Wranx...lol...thanks for feeling me....

Raph~...LOL...you got mail....


thanks guys!
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
16 posted 2004-11-11 04:46 PM


cruel trick! pbllllllt
babygirlwlove
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17 posted 2004-11-11 05:02 PM


**LMAO**

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littlewing
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18 posted 2004-11-11 07:38 PM


the infinite . . .

beautiful Mari


babygirlwlove
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19 posted 2004-11-11 07:58 PM


thank you littlewing

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

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