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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2004-10-23 02:25 PM

Winter’s harshness girds the apex of
loin’s embers as breath pants upon
the frosted pane.

Countless chimes of grandfathers
have woken the slumbering dreams
of passion now chilled and lying
still.

Leaves darken the eyes of watchfulness
and bring to bear a calm from a
storm that once brewed in wait the
petal’s blossoming.

Straws stand ragged the fields of minds,
awaiting a whispered wisdom of truth
which fills the wanting soul.

Soon the dusk shall cover all of dawn’s
birth as a life’s walk wanders aimlessly
the hills of sweetness and the settled
shimmering of waters deep shall cool
the wearied feet.

Bring to ears the sounds of angel’s....
as life once born is brought before
the reaper’s blade and a shroud lies
gently upon the still breath of me
beyond the call of ears deafened by
darkness...serene

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-10-23 02:33 PM

you melt me

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-10-23 02:57 PM

Barry - you make even fading seem beautiful-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2004-10-23 06:28 PM

Barry

Lots of real vivid image lines in this. A very enjoyable read because I could feel the words rather than just read them.

Eric

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2004-10-30 01:38 AM

WOW what a look at winter through your eyes....

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2004-10-30 09:49 AM

A masterful write, dear Barry!

Its beauty gave me shivers all over.

Love, Margherita

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

6 posted 2004-10-31 09:13 AM

Hey Barry...masterful write you have here. Loved it! Bravo my friend.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2004-10-31 09:28 AM

Barry,
Not perfect but close. Wonderful write.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2004-10-31 09:31 AM

Fantastic write m'friend.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

9 posted 2004-11-01 08:06 PM

Especially liked the feel of dusk masking dawn...what a great expression, among many.
Also find such inspiration in your works.
TD

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

10 posted 2004-11-01 08:46 PM

The opening stanza alone would have been enough, but you followed it up with more, and more until . . . serene!

Super write my friend....

jimmy

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