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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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the sky lowers, black on black rain pelts at my blinded windows vertical missy higgins sings for me and i find myself drowning in you in your oceanic eyes that hold storms of the sea perfectly with shadowy fish tangled deep i see all this save for my reflection and I am haunted by my illicit exquisite dream but I can't really wake up so I just drift in between ~ani difranco~ [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (10-22-2004 06:39 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
when are you going to do me the honor..of letting me try to write with you? this ma'am is as usual.. exceptional |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree As you always do...you paint emotion into the scene of your poem, with just a few well chosen words. Much enjoyed!  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Hey Ron, I second you there . . . Maree, you always astound me I saw sheets of water falling down huge panes of glass . . . |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A reflection searching the horizon of calm perhaps. Always enjoy your writes and this one is no exception. You have a unique talent for saying so much in so little words but never failing to express your thoughts or visions. Excellent. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
c'mere love and get a hug.  the tone of this is strikingly cerulean...   love you luscious MUAH |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
There is a Polish saying: a drowning man will grasp at razor blades John |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
gee, and here I was thinking that I had a way with women. charming  |
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poe Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 180Heading to China |
Quite a beautiful poem, the images in embedded inside leave the reader speechless. Tomorrow comes for those who fear it. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome as usual |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
The ol' "fish eye" eh? No really, Maree. This is wonderful! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
oceanic eyes, beautiful nod to neruda and thankfully not read by wesley snipes..seriously who picked him? meh |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 *gentle sigh* |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maree, as always with your poetry, I am sitting here in awe of your talent. I wish that I had the ability to get across what I want to say in as few words as you do. By the way, that picture of you up there is awesome, too.  Hugs, Ethel |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
bump cause I can and it deserves it. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's so danged easy to get lost in your poetry... in the nicest of all ways possible... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sir Ron, thank you! Please email me, and the honor will be all mine.  Martie, you always say nice things, thank you so much. Sue, I astound you huh? How? I don't know lol, but I thank you and appreciate all your replies. Mark Christopher? I thank you kind Sir. M'lady, HUGS back to you..... "the tone of this is strikingly cerulean..." Fancy that eh! lol MUAH back Gorgeousness. Huan Yi? "the simple lack of her is more to me than others presence" (Unknown) Oh and there's this one..."mud thrown usually means ground lost" (also Unknown) Thought i'd share too... afterall, it's about giving as well yes? Oh and ... M'lady... "gee, and here I was thinking that I had a way with women." did I mention I was "drowning" ? I believe I did poe, I'm so glad you enjoyed. I thank you. Dixie, thanks for the "awesome" Bro? at least the ol fish eye gives a broader view of things mmm? Thanks for the wonderful. Almost ready for our Collab? Bello, well... you know me and Neruda, and who picked him? must've been crazy. Thanks m'friend. Dawn? Gentle thank you Ethel, thanks for the awesome on both subjects. Ice, thank you muchly. Mark Christopher? give us a kiss muahhh Kari? smiling at you, thank you. and I am haunted by my illicit exquisite dream but I can't really wake up so I just drift in between ~ani difranco~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
wish this one was mine |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Whew I almost missed this beauty, and it is just so you! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Whew I almost missed this beauty, and it is just so you! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
quote: Sometimes someone else says 'zactly what you would have said. In those cases, originality is useless. Hugs M j |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, guess Mysteria liked it as much as the rest of us. Outstanding, Maree. Your words pelt us with passion. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
I missed it and went looking for it. Tasty! Visually delicious as always. You have such a gifted way of painting masterpieces whenever the mood strikes you to pen anything. I imagine your grocery list would be something I'd be proud to have authored! You sink so much time, energy, and passion into everything you write it radiates back to the reader infinitely. I can't tell you how much I appreciate your writing, and to that end, how much encouragement and inspiration I receive from you to continue writing myself. You are a gifted girl...no question. Back to the top with this one! Warm regards as always, Kevin |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
breathtaking as always Maree! And that picture, it does you justice Awesome writing my friend and as always you leave me wishing I could write like you!! Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Maree...your words are priceless |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very powerfully written....strong, very strong.. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So nicely said...James |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 yes..the drowning theme...love it! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was a fantastic write... all I can say is WHOE!!! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
as I believe it has already been said, damn, Im glad I didnt miss this one. Outstanding write gal! |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I'm glad I found this......... beautiful write. |
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