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Liquid Walls |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Liquid Walls Echoes of silence resonating against velvet drapes Enticing caress in scalloped walls of life's escapes Projected images in conversation of warm embrace Flow from liquid canyon currents caught in chase Wisps of whisperings rested between lobes and lash Give credence to thought tangles dangling in sash Upsweep of recline bared to silk canvas cross in cry As a parade of preludes danced across emerald sigh Solfeggio scale erupts in the ancient visions learned Refreshing inquire of souls as silently they yearned Breaths of wisdom dwell in these added tones of two Emphasized in syllables of unspoken dreams in view Lyrics of comfort quick step in every beat from chart Pacing the churn of anticipation in cascading heart Steady the burst riding a swirl between burgundy halls Written in promise where barriers flow in liquid walls Mark Christopher |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Serene sounds, sir... an excellence in exhibiting equilibrium even in flight |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Mark It sounds immortal Dave |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Kari - Thank you and serene it is in gaining equilibrium but assured firmly on the ground. Dave - Immortal is a great way to put it. Thank you. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
well now you wonder how people can be inspired from you.....stunning write Mark~ always ~~*~~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
it's beautiful Mark, the imagery the flow all of it.  Maree  and I am haunted |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dang, but you do have one awesome dictionary. You write superbly Mark, and your poetry is always chock full of visions and thoughts that most of us never dream of. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark You drape words in wonder. What a beautiful poem! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mark this is exquisite writing...much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
'intone, oh my servants these verses from me' Part of a Bahai prayer, translated from the original Persian. I 'created' my own notes, sang this prayer for some friends, but did not know until someone more familiar with ancient chants pointed out to me that I seemed to favor an ancient Gregorian note scale. Your poem reminded me of that night, my first awareness of the solfeggio scale. You never know what notes your poetry will release. Thank you, for this has helped release a healing energy I need today. I still don't know much about solfeggio, but understand it has something to do with natural healing through vibrations, a way to balance yin/yang, and that there is some relationship between mathematical formulas of 3-6-9. LOL, guess its time to do some serious studying? [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (10-22-2004 07:56 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Here discerns mystic wisdom in every echo of each and every line. Quite humbled by the breadth of your unique understanding. Thoroughly enjoyed each read. Also, thanks for the spirit you share so very well. Inspiring. TD |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
 Your words are utterly poetic ~ and healing. They resonate with my energetic body and touched my soul. Thank you for the vibrational tonic!  Love & Light, Linda |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Lovely write Mark, but trust me I have had those liquid walls once to often and they done went down the drain!  Firm and steadfast ahead to where it takes one? Who knows? The journey is worth the time invested though. See, did you know all that came through? LOL.The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all art and science. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Lauren - Still I wonder but then again, I never read my own til months later. Thank you so much. Maree - Your spirit and wonder are what is wonderful and I thank you dearly. Magnus - Thank you much for those ever so kind words. You sir inspire in your own writes and I always enjoy the interaction. Martie - And I still hold firm that you are the 8th wonder of the poetic world. Thank you dear one. Enchantress - Thank you and I am glad you enjoyed. Midnitesun - Just knowing that this has reached you in any way is a reason to have written it. Study away and I know you won't be disappointed. Vibrations can come in the simplest forms of note. Listen to the silence and feel the tone. Thank you very much for the sharing of your thoughts on this. ThisDiamond - Understanding is no more than being open to the possibilities of what could not be. As for the spirit and the inspire, well that is a circle that you yourself are a part of and a familiar, distinct pattern that you project. I thank you kindly for your generous response. Linda - I do hope it is a tonic you can appreciate. Thank you for taking the time to feel the intent in this piece. Mysteria - It has been a journey of time and a journey with many inscriptions left in the heart. I know it is worth the time invested in it as I live it. Liquid walls do allow entrance with the right password. Thank you dearly for your investment in this piece. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I usually don't have the right words to say what a poem makes me feel or what I thought about it... all I can say is "awesome" or "beautiful" because it touches me in a way I can't express forgive my lack of words |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Dixie - No need to forgive as just knowing it touched you is enough. Thank you for letting me know and for stopping by. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Echoes of silence resonating against velvet drapes Enticing caress in scalloped walls of life's escapes ===================================== what a lovely luxurious opening... immediately you pull the reader in with rich imagery and rhyme. ~~~~~~~ Flow from liquid canyon currents caught in chase Wisps of whisperings rested between lobes and lash Give credence to thought tangles dangling in sash ============================= and now the moth is giddy... those lines rock... the alliterations, the assonance, the word play, the internal rhymes... and yes oh yes..the personifications. When read aloud this is a perfect blending of cadence and harmony. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Upsweep of recline bared to silk canvas cross in cry As a parade of preludes danced across emerald sigh ========================= "parade of preludes" youre so cool.  and yeah... ya aint kidding about the sigh Solfeggio scale erupts in the ancient visions learned Refreshing inquire of souls as silently they yearned Breaths of wisdom dwell in these added tones of two Emphasized in syllables of unspoken dreams in view ============================== that verse is poetic gold.. for the imagery, the expression of intent, for the personify and all the layers it's inspire holds... ~~~~~~~ Steady the burst riding a swirl between burgundy halls Written in promise where barriers flow in liquid walls ================================== "liquid walls" .... *smiling at you for that personify and symbol* Yeppers...a high inspire in deed.. both in poetic form and in emotional expression. This is really a beautiful poem MC... a melody of anitcipation and promise. Heart on sleeve poetry...youre at your best. and I do so love when ya do, re, mi, fa, sol, la, ti, do, in rhyme. Ink runs from the corners of my mouth. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow, Mark! This was an absolute masterpiece and was written to perfection. Your words flowed so beautifully. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mark A beautiful way to end this piece....Eloquently done! "Lyrics of comfort quick step in every beat from chart Pacing the churn of anticipation in cascading heart Steady the burst riding a swirl between burgundy halls Written in promise where barriers flow in liquid walls" I surely do like that. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Mark - this is lovely - liquid walls - beautiful term - dreams must be on the mind- Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Maga~ And you would know, even without me saying it, that this one is 'special'~ Feeling the movement of your word-song~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
..."Steady the burst riding a swirl between burgundy halls Written in promise where barriers flow in liquid walls" Called me back for another read...because I was thinking that all barriers should melt in liquid, when people find that second chance at trust. Smiling. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
JM - I take it you didn't like this one and you don't think I should give it to her then.  Thank you so much for always giving heart and soul in your replies and making me feel as if my poetry does hold a little something. YGLTGIH ... N!!! Sue - Well hello and thank you for those kind words. You are appreciated much. Eric - If you surely do like it then I surely am pleased as I hold your opinions very high. Thank you my friend. Susan - Thank you much for the beauty in your reply, but dreams? Never? Been pinched many times and I feel every one of them. Marge - I do know that the imspire is very special and I thank you dearly. ThisDiamond - Yes and there are slow melts and quick melts, some cool and some hot. There is balance in the between and the real test is to find the balance without getting frost bit or burned. Thank you for the revisit and the second look at the words. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Liquid Walls" conjures more than a few images (grin, I'm sure you can imagine too) but the first thought I had was of this new massage machine--pulsating jets of water sheathed beneath plastic--so one can climb in fully clothed and have a complete water massage while never getting wet. (My insurance didn't cover that.  )But your poetry, and reading you is close to what I imagined that therapy might be. in other words? "ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
serenity - you said "pulsating jets of water sheathed beneath plastic--so one can climb in fully clothed and have a complete water massage while never getting wet." fully clothed? well of course, is there any other way? Then you said "But your poetry, and reading you is close to what I imagined that therapy might be." But would getting wet be an option compared to the machine? Thank you dearly sweet thang. I do appreciate you more than ya know and you still owe me that dance? |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Liquid walls....well, already you've put me a jacuzzi with 30 million soft spewing jets, caressing my thoughts right into mush... Wonderful write....easy lulls of whispering color... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beyond my reach! quote: This incredible "sound" is enough to get the emotion started. Very beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Welp...it isn't often that I don't have words to express what I take from a poem but this my friend, is one of those times that I have no words... please just know that I enjoyed this and thought it spectacular. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
LeeJ - I am glad you could hear the color. Thank you very much. Margherita - Thank you much. Gentle Spirit - If you enjoyed it then that is what counts. Thank you dearly. |
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