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Ericc
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0 posted 2004-10-22 02:18 PM



Ask the flame...

"Why do you burn?"

And hear the whisper of
your name in falling
ashes.



© Copyright 2004 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-10-22 02:24 PM


Well blow everyone away why don't you???

Geez....

not fair.

Susan
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2 posted 2004-10-22 02:56 PM


Oooooh - this is sooooo gooooood - so good.

Susan

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3 posted 2004-10-22 03:00 PM


WOW!!!!!!!!!!
Even fewer words..with an even stronger punch!
Excellent piece of work Eric.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

DavePage
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4 posted 2004-10-22 03:13 PM


For you it said in it's light
For you it said in darkening debris
For you it said as it laid ashes

To build another light

dave

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5 posted 2004-10-22 03:15 PM


Oh, my... do you ever have a way with words! *S* I like this very much. *S*
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6 posted 2004-10-22 08:22 PM


Spectacular write Eric.
What a way to go!
TD

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7 posted 2004-10-22 08:26 PM


such a beautiful whisper!

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Margherita
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8 posted 2004-10-24 09:47 AM


And I step closer
to embrace the flame
to hear my name

two hearts now burning
the fire reaching high
into the sky
in supreme devotion
so bright the light
a moment's glory
before we die

we are the gift
to the night

from the ashes
early in the morn
in the colors of dawn
love is reborn


Just a few sacred words from you are enough
to form a whole orchestra of emotions.

Absolutely awesome!

I love you,
Margherita

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9 posted 2004-10-24 10:22 AM


Eric,  you are a master of short but powerfully thought provoking poems.

Well done.

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10 posted 2004-10-24 06:41 PM



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11 posted 2004-10-24 08:52 PM


smiling wide

you are the master of this--

I do so admire your ability to convey through implication.

*shaking my head*

I am keeping this one.

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