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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-10-22 08:21 AM



redwood of lady hair
mist of morning terpsichore
where giants are quiet
their utterings without wind

river is bangle shimmer
wrist wound bracalet winding
damp the charms of vale
with earth in love skin

night cape indigotin
on shoulders of flaxen
cling of furrow vaporing
maiden with woman mind

and she dances her soul
in the dark water
she is the current under
that bestirs dark stones

into the mirage of dayspeak


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Dark

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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
1 posted 2004-10-22 08:31 AM


Oh, I like this ...

and she dances her soul
in the dark water
she is the current under
that bestirs dark stones

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-10-22 08:36 AM


my most favorite time of the day, and you have penned her well


Gentle Spirit
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Posts 13989

3 posted 2004-10-22 08:41 AM


and she dances her soul
in the dark water
she is the current under
that bestirs dark stones

into the mirage of dayspeak


yes....this is wonderful imagery Dark.
Good morning hugs.

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2004-10-22 08:42 AM


Ok.  
Morning coffee, check.
Read DS, check.
Sigh heavy, check.

Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

5 posted 2004-10-22 08:56 AM


mmm perfect harmony..
with undertones

K

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
6 posted 2004-10-22 10:35 AM


Oooooh Dark - I feel the mood of the forest, of the Redwoods, of the stir of nature and her sensuality - and I want to be there - to feel her kiss and wrap myself in her arms - to be the maiden that stirs the waters -

Love the feel of this -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
7 posted 2004-10-23 07:14 PM


Liked the sensual description of the Redwood forest, and the last line was particularly splendid. You have the broadened view of a prophet.
TD

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
8 posted 2004-10-23 07:45 PM


Dark~
OMG !
The beauty of this is simply stunning~
Read three times ... so far~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Martie
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California
9 posted 2004-10-23 08:38 PM


DS

I know this place...it is beautiful!

Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635

10 posted 2004-12-06 02:19 PM


night cape indigotin
on shoulders of flaxen
cling of furrow vaporing
maiden with woman mind

~*~

Tell me then
of other lives
and the paths taken
by your footsteps...

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