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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Blanketed, she sleeps. Her roots, embedded in this barren landscape. Her mind plays tricks on her as each leaf, her children fall to their deaths crying in dissent because in truth, they all just need to be held. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Ohh ouch! I'm not sure if I felt like the one sleeping and confused here, or if I felt like one of the children, needing to be held. Either way this is a heart-wrenching, to the point, write. Amazing... It'll be in my head all night. Probably all day too... sleep isn't looking very likely. Hope things are well for you... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"because in truth, they all just need to be held." severed to the bone here.....*sigh* |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
BAM!  wow... Visibly impressed here! |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
your vision transform the page, girl... beautiful **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
so poignant Sue but so very well done....  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
so much spun on one little leaf, ya know? who cries louder, mother or child? hard to let go, hard to fly too. very beautiful words from one who sees them too. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very dear and near... this was magnificant prose..thank you |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Alyssa, exactly! I feel the same way Thank you Thank you Dawn Hey Kari, thanks for reading Thanks Mari Thank you so much Donna Michele, yes and yes *smile* thank you Thank YOU Lee Thanks guys |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!!!! Eric |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes.. very nicely done ma'am.... very nice indeed... |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
seee amazing......  ~~*~~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
the coming of age, it's wonderful isnt it? one leaf at a time Well said Sue Maree and I am haunted |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sue This has real emotional impact...impressed here!  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, I never looked at it that way before! I think I'll go hug a tree and make it feel better! ~ and me!  Your pen drips very poetic ink. Soulful Sue! Love a tree and it will love you back!  Linda |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Damn, Susie This is VERY good...Not one word out of place..and not one word extra. Impressed, yes! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
missed reading you a lot |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
short on words, long on ache..awesome oh winged one |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Does every tree weep for its leaves? Do we all weep for lost children? Very thought provoking write, Sue. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Eric, thank you so much Ron *smile* thank you, sir. Yes, Lauren, I see *smile* Thanks Maree, and goodness, well said yourself. Wow! If you are impressed Martie, I must have done something right. Thank you aww Linda, exactly, I can see you out there getting strange looks from your neighbors hugging trees. *smile* *smile* Thank you Eddie, you taught me how to tighten up my writing. Thanks Dix, missed you too Raph, *smiling* thanks . . . you know you taught me how to make it short and to the point. Yes, Ken we do, thank you so much. Thanks guys. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hi littlewing. Mmm I love this. What a talent. I seen the duet you did with babygirl earlier...but it was a piece by you I wanted to bump up...so I have chosen to make it this one. You have a remarkable talent my friend. I really am jealous that I did not write this. LOL! But at least I got to read it. BRAVO! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Her offspring transformed ...she still reaches for Heaven, to be blessed anew. This is so touching, dear Sue. Love, Margherita |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Said it perfectly, my friend. jwesley |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Love this - susanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
There are days when I would rather be a tree. Interesting and enjoyable piece. sag |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
some leaves grow and others fall.. some leave home when independence calls... poignant write... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sue?... just... wow... so incredibly powerful... Miss you, my sis... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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