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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-10-21 10:47 AM



Rendering

The cold seeps in
where empty holds court
trying to break away from the mundane
Cycling before the crash
where intimacy is lacking
and the eyes are blinded
by the past

Heavy the sighs
as the wait lengthens
and time does it number on me
as always

The warmth of tea
and the promise of vanilla
slight the ache
allow the lingering
until the fever of remembrance
is conditioned to the stimuli
and I am prepared
for tomorrow


M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

© Copyright 2004 Wynter Bliss - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-10-21 10:50 AM


I love the uniqueness of your writing M~  
passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2004-10-21 12:16 PM


I love that ending verse
maybe because I can relate so well

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2004-10-21 02:08 PM


.....the promise of vanilla
slight the ache
allow the lingering
until the fever of remembrance
is conditioned to the stimuli

~*~

One of my favorite panaceas...vanilla...

Enchantress
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4 posted 2004-10-21 02:10 PM


"The warmth of tea
and the promise of vanilla
slight the ache
allow the lingering
until the fever of remembrance
is conditioned to the stimuli
and I am prepared
for tomorrow"

Love this passage especially M.
Well done.
Hugs.

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

GG
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since 2002-12-03
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Lost in thought
5 posted 2004-10-22 08:19 PM


I hate the part of the night where I prep myself for the next day. Usually tomorrow looks bleak, too. I love your words.


Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

peppermint35
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6 posted 2004-10-23 08:47 AM


I enjoyed reading this.. very much...

somehow it seemed to be a balm...

   at least for me

Pepper
"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
7 posted 2004-10-23 11:02 AM


Thank you everyone...

I am remiss for not responding much and apologize... but as it sometimes happens
negativity seems to be following or surrounding me and for now I will just read  when/if having time as my younger brother
(only 53) has just had a stroke and well poetry and words seem to escape me for now.

hugs and thanks for the attention you lend me when needed

Maureen

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