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Recieve (another Cpat/muted event)
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Recieve (another Cpat/muted event) |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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Recieve `````````````````````````` The wind sucked the dust, a swirling whirlpool of grit, into the empty phone booth tickling dog-eared and dog-tired yellow pages into a restless tsunami of oragami butterflies beating fragile wings against a dirty plexiglass frame scribbled with "Mary was here" and "do you believe in Jesus?" All i ever needed to know of the bible written in cheap nail polish right under some number I know i'll never call as I look at my own scratched number wondering if the coins will be enough to take my thoughts and pleads from here without hearing "for three more minutes, please deposit $2.50" or the click of disconnect already so loud in my ears still yet, I wonder will it be answered or ignored as I in this Mecca of public phonetic interchange am stung by more than dust and fragile wings blinded by a fragment of memory seeping unwilling over drought stricken cheeks to parched parted lips uttering "hello" into the reciever greeting the nothing nothing more than crossed wires and maybe empty pockets speak louder than words finding no quarter...no safe keeping here leaving the line dead, no one here to take your call no one here... ~ ~ ~ (again, my thanks to Cpat for this duet) [This message has been edited by muted (10-21-2004 11:01 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You two are flowing... such a lovely river's bend... |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
wonderfully strung together  |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wow...everything you two bring together fits so perfectly and flows soooooooo smoothly....just lovely... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Another Brava my friends..... another brava indeed... very well done you two. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
what enriching words, discriptions, images...astounding write you two....wow! Thank you |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic weaving of words here you two! Again...well done!!! ~Hugs to you both~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Wow!!! I can feel the grit crushed between my teeth as the dust swirls....so good to stop by and read this amazing collaboration....warm wishes ~P |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Cool reading. Love the flavor. Yanno? Now that I think about it, I can't remember the last time I saw a directory in a phonebooth |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You two really flavored this well....Very well done! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow... this is my favourite, you guys are on a roll. Dare I say more? going into my library M and I am haunted |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
My God, you guys write beautifuly together, reminded me of the black and white phones, when it actually cost a dime to get disappointment . . . |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Again folks, the credit goes to the Muted kid... most of this is hers... and none of it would have been at all, if she hadn't come up with the idea... It's always a learning experience with her.. me learning how to keep up and not mess up what she does so well.. thanks D, for the pleasure... and the lessons |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
thank you everybody so much and Ron, thank you....and i think everyone knows just how big a contribution youve made to this and many other poems its still and always a pleasure |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a beaut! You've just dusted all of us with your poetic magic. Nice harmony of styles. |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
i have been to that phone booth it's in the middle of ... oh wait or was it .. I loved this one could actually see the person standing there. It's not the blindfold that blinds you, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
you guys are something on your own and together, daaaaamn |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Very excellent writing, you two. I was also going to say that I could see the person standing there in that phone booth, worrying that she wouldn't have enough money, or that the guy on the other end wouldn't give the answer she wanted...even if she got the call through. It was kind of like a scene in a movie to me. Hugs to you both, Ethel |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
good job u 2 bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
  kisses to you bothand I am haunted |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Nice "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Yes, an event! I felt I was there. Perfectly blended duet. Love, Margherita |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely work, you two! Corinne |
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