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ecrivan
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0 posted 2004-10-20 09:02 PM



One must grind the coffee bean
until you get a smoother blend
the coarser variety
doesn't offer the same end.

One is given the gift of language
the coarser tongue
captures attention
yet can turns away the will
the smoother the tongue
the better the sales pitch
that might just be an offer of love
on the wing as the flight of a dove.

There’s always hope for a crude settler
with a coarse tongue
to develop his taste for finer blends,
correct his incivility by making amends
always an equal force to undo the finery
sends man back into his awkward days...
then there was no need to grind beans
or live up to another's hope of finesse.


© Copyright 2004 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-10-20 09:23 PM


One is given the gift of language
the coarser tongue
captures attention
yet can turns away the will
the smoother the tongue

~*~

I'll take mine with cream, please...
I'm often chided for having some coffee with my cream...this is a charming poem, ecrivan, but it speaks carafe-fulls!

ecrivan
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2 posted 2004-10-21 12:34 PM


Thanks for commenting. And one is pured It's my attempt at saying that finesse doesn't make a better person...poems like this one will eventually be put together on people's perception of one another, true or false


littlewing
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3 posted 2004-10-22 04:57 AM


ha!  I see this very well, Martin
I have missed your writing.

DavePage
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4 posted 2004-10-30 03:23 PM


Coarse writing, smooth writing how on ever do people feel that the love poems they write originate - by passionate post cards

You remind me of a few words from a Terry Pratchet in which a witch said "it only took two months before he was getting out of the bath to use the privy" and that is what a woman can achieve.

I like the words, the thoughts and the writing

Dave

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5 posted 2004-10-30 03:37 PM


Martin, you really should consider publishing
ecrivan
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6 posted 2004-10-30 03:44 PM


I have considered the publishing Passing but like many others including youself perhaps am limited by the funds I have...so some have suggested I marry a rich widow...now isn't that a typical scenario in life?


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7 posted 2004-10-30 04:21 PM


LOL Martin, at that reply of yours
but Martin? then you'd be a kept man

enjoyed the write on many refined levels

ecrivan
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8 posted 2004-10-30 04:37 PM


maybe I should put an ad in a local newspaper, poetry to publish, need a widow publisher..hehe a man of masked talents at your disposal...never said anything about being unkept


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