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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

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0 posted 2004-10-20 01:51 PM

A Quiet Crowd Of Rain

a quiet crowd
of rain
tumbles
past the
window

every drop
loving
the ground

rushing to her
heedless

while
our own
sheets

dry

warm
to the
window’s
coolness

bless us in
other ways

we lie here
contented
witnesses

to a thousand
thousand
trysts

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-10-20 02:02 PM

Well the title drew me in...
but the poem kept me here...
listening...
a quiet spot of light
in shadows.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2004-10-20 02:04 PM

I enjoyed the quiet place this took me to...
well done....

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

3 posted 2004-10-20 02:04 PM

I've often enjoyed that feeling.

Dave

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2004-10-20 02:06 PM

I know you don't get rain often... but when it inspires so beautifully, I can only wish more falls your way. *S*

I agree with Sunshine... the poem that follows lives up to every expectation your fantastic title generated... and then some. *S*

we lie here
contented
witnesses

to a thousand
thousand
trysts

What a lovely image! *S*

Martie

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California

5 posted 2004-10-20 02:15 PM

Ed

So lovely to read and think on the images and meaning of this beauty. So enjoyed! It's good to see you posting...I've missed you!

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

6 posted 2004-10-20 08:22 PM

This gave me a lovely daydream. Thank you for a quiet place in time.

hugs, Marti

A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows.
–St. Francis of Assisi

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

7 posted 2004-10-20 09:58 PM

most lovely sir....indeed

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

8 posted 2004-10-20 10:00 PM

the title drew me in.....yes

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

9 posted 2004-10-21 12:53 PM

a warming thought on a cold dreary night here

MGROVES

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california

10 posted 2004-10-21 04:27 AM

a nice way to brighten a rainy day

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

11 posted 2004-10-21 06:51 AM

oh my...

love the rhythm
and the feel to this...

lovely,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

12 posted 2004-10-21 07:52 AM

a fire made warm in the quiet of rain words, dancing

Lovely

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

13 posted 2004-10-21 11:08 AM

Doesn't seem too crowded from here, Ed

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

14 posted 2004-10-21 11:25 AM

"A Quiet Crowd of Rain" ~ a poetic and highly intriguing title.

I identified with, understood, and felt your words. Very appealing read.

Rain, rain, don't go away
Please stay another day.

Linda

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

15 posted 2004-10-21 11:48 AM

a lovely, peaceful feeling in your poem as I sit here watching my own quiet rainfall. It appears to be a rapid one with many drops per inch and the wolf-laprobe hanging on the fence has ceased its drying/a contrast to your sheets--yep, title brought me in, too.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

16 posted 2004-10-21 04:57 PM

I see this happening before my eyes Ed, for it's raining here... finally after years without. YAY!

hugs to you m'friend

Mxx

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

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state of confusion

17 posted 2004-10-21 04:58 PM

Good reflection on rain and love!

Corinne

pandonov
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b/w conscience and insolence

18 posted 2004-10-21 05:27 PM

like this, my kind of poem

Magnus

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South Carolina, USA

19 posted 2004-10-21 05:28 PM

Well done Ed. Very nice write. A thousand
trysts? Wow!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

20 posted 2004-10-22 04:50 AM

Beautiful writing, Ed
as always
This brought a smile to my face
It is raining here and cold.

icebox
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in the shadows

21 posted 2004-10-22 08:13 AM

I salute you!

soul drifter
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Colorado

22 posted 2004-10-22 09:49 AM

Very nice write. I write about rain all the time, so I quite enjoyed this...

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

23 posted 2004-10-22 10:01 AM

We've had "flocks" of rain here....but not as nice as this Rat..you're a very talented individual..

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

24 posted 2004-10-22 07:46 PM

Umm... everything everyone else says. They said it better then I can. It rains here all the time, and I love the rain, but I could never give it words like this...
Love it.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

25 posted 2004-10-23 01:37 AM

Just want to add my two cents. Very much enjoyed.

kayjay
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Posts 2015
Oregon

26 posted 2004-10-23 11:19 AM

I'm always intrigued when the word placement supports the theme so well. Great job! Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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