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ThisDiamond
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0 posted 2004-10-19 11:09 PM



Fantasy smiles in candlelit shadows
Turning silence like smoke in the silhouette of us
The way that fills in empty hours and welling needs
Making us into colors unfamiliar and cool
Surfaces and undertow, like friends spilled and blended
Turning knots of allure, excess gold left shimmering on the surface
Fantasy smiles in the hall between doors
Making finger puppets on the walls, caresses of the cuffs beneath the sash
Gradually mouthing secrets and refilling the shape of deeper
Always more, and never less
Quietly in flood, guided by the mind devouring want
Replacing the necessity of empty in its shallow
An overflow where visions make wet the night

Copyright Kkh 10/19/04

© Copyright 2004 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
Robert Joseph
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1 posted 2004-10-20 04:39 AM


A lingering sense of sensuality and soothing calm. Charming work, Kathy.

Robert Joseph

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2 posted 2004-10-20 10:46 AM


good write
bernie

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DavePage
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3 posted 2004-10-20 01:43 PM


Like it a lot TD

Dave

Mark Bohannan
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4 posted 2004-10-20 02:28 PM



Fantasy smiles in candlelit shadows
Turning silence like smoke in the silhouette of us

Turning knots of allure, excess gold left shimmering on the surface

Quietly in flood, guided by the mind devouring want
Replacing the necessity of empty in its shallow
An overflow where visions make wet the night
*********************

Some very cool lines in this one and images to saturate the mind with.  A true gift of chemistry between two.  Loved it.


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5 posted 2004-10-20 05:31 PM


passion filled,  chock full of tasty metaphors,  a hint of spice and a dash
of delight...what a perfect blending.

Robert Joseph
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6 posted 2004-10-24 12:33 PM



Kathy, you've spelled magic in this passionate unfolding of the heart's pages.

Greatly enjoyed.

Robert Joseph

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