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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2004-10-19 11:09 PM

{Emerald carpet-- that green
deep jade along the mire}

We should share the quiet
when the sky is blue
and oceans mirror back  white
clouds glow orange
as far as the eyes can see

You speak of butterflies,
how they bleed color
          fluttering in the horizon
shimmering gold tones
of xanadu--
of some other occasion
when once the world was still

   Rearrange the shadows with me
between flowers & fragments of sun
the windows will share   shades  of green

even after rain--

You the seed,       darkened by desire
inside early flesh of midnight
in stillness remain     realm of light
upon the waters surface
as I await --

respirez cet air my
toile foncée -- verdissez ce vert

manière d'observation de coupure de nuit pour
lune
~~*~~ (french lines)
(breathe this air    my
dark canvas-- green

    watching  night break -way for the
moon)

~~**~~
Thank you Mark B for such inspiration

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2004-10-20 01:51 AM

and you were asking for help, sheesh
This is so beautiful, Lauren.
It was like - it left a pang in my chest.

and the language . . . *smile*

I loved this right away, amazing lines, wish I had written them:

{Emerald carpet-- that green
deep jade along the mire}

Just amazing . . .

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2004-10-20 02:15 AM

bootiful Lauren *smile*

Maree

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2004-10-20 02:40 AM

Very bootyful actually. It slid like silk down the page Lauren.

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

4 posted 2004-10-20 04:16 AM

Incredible... as usual, your work astounds me and fills me with a warmth I can't describe. I worship your poetry..

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-10-20 05:33 AM

very pretty write

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-10-20 09:03 AM

So very beautiful Lauren...very beautiful!!
Love ya lady~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

7 posted 2004-10-20 09:04 AM

this is just lovley...

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

8 posted 2004-10-20 10:41 AM

Great
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2004-10-20 11:12 AM

good gawd woman.....what beauty and softness of your soul you lay down so exquisetly on these pages of blue...

but you know me, I love everything you write....
and this is no exception..

you soar dear gal..

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

10 posted 2004-10-20 11:22 AM

Sue~ Sharon~ and Maree~

thank you for taking time to read....

much!

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

11 posted 2004-10-20 11:23 AM

Zach~ Dixie~ Nancy~

I appreciate your reply....hugssss and love...

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

12 posted 2004-10-20 11:26 AM

Bernie~ Donna~

hiya

and thank you too for reading and taking time to enjoy....Donna...luv you my sister....

~

BGWL~
thanks...

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

13 posted 2004-10-20 01:07 PM

We should share the quiet
when the sky is blue
and oceans mirror back  white
clouds glow orange
as far as the eyes can see

*****
You the seed,       darkened by desire
inside early flesh of midnight
in stillness remain     realm of light
upon the waters surface
as I await --

*************************

I don't know what I did to inspire such a beauty of a poem, but I do know that this is one beautifully serene piece laced with your awesome talent for imagery and in a style that you own yourself.  I very much enjoyed this and if one of my poems inspired this, then that serves as a reason I do write.  Sometimes even my scribble lands somewhere.  Awesome write.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

14 posted 2004-10-20 01:36 PM

May you ALWAYS be inspired...

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

15 posted 2004-10-20 01:52 PM

agree with others awesome write

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

16 posted 2004-10-20 07:17 PM

Silky...James

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

17 posted 2004-10-20 09:17 PM

Absolutely beautiful, sweet lady!!
Hugs,

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

18 posted 2004-10-21 01:02 AM

sighs

Tequilia_Sunrise
Senior Member

since 2003-02-19

Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada

19 posted 2004-10-21 04:10 AM

lovely write

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

20 posted 2004-10-21 09:03 AM

Very very nice. Especially when read in the morning

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

21 posted 2004-10-21 09:06 AM

What beautiful language and imagery, you have drawn me into a warm reverie....~P

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

22 posted 2004-10-21 06:49 PM

I'll simply sigh...

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

23 posted 2004-10-21 07:16 PM

and I will sigh with the Captain....SIIGGGGH!

Beautifully woven fabric you have here.

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