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Achilles

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Huan Yi
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Achilles


a cavalry troop
on bicycles

clothespin warplanes
on a string

shooting marbles
across the battlefield

picket rifles
and mud grenades

© Copyright 2004 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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what a scene
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2 posted 10-19-2004 10:22 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

I remember these times...Boys, playing at something they need never know.

Nicely done!
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smiling...they made me be "the nurse."

So guess who got in trouble for ripping up sheets for bandages and sneaking ketchup out of the fridge?

mmmhmmm.

A simpler time, and understood, now in retrospect, how that game was romanticized into something more palatable.

Sometime I'll have to tell you about G.I. Joe on "leave."

(Barbie always dumped Ken for him.)

smile?

Susan
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Ah- fun - playing war, we called it.  We had a brick fort with a tunnel exit - and an acre of gardens and barns and pasture to plan our maneuvers around - great memories -

susan

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~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

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great write
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Strong writing and short,
something to be envied  
and I have to echo Ed here, as well.
Huan Yi
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Thanks Everyone

John
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whew! those were the days...i have four brothers and they let me play war games with them as long as our parents aren't at home...lovely poem, you have a knack for telling a lot with a few words
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...and ashes ashes we all fall down.
It was nice not understanding.
Thank you for this write...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

babygirlwlove
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oooo great imagery...

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

ice
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Yi
The title is perfect...
The content brings back memories,...My mainstream life of living with younger children is over, do kids still play at war games?
Do kids play at anything at all, in a community way besides organized sports?
I don't see groups of ten year olds organizing their own scenarios of life through play like I experienced in early life...
We "played" at war games, yes, but that is why I am against war in my adult life....Yes, we played at cowboys and Indians, and the red devils always bit the dust...but that is why I am pagan follower today of many first nation spiritual customs...
The short lines of this poem brought long lines of thought out of my mind..

enjoyed
---------ice
  ><>  
LeeJ
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we play war when we kids, and when we're grown to.

very well done!
Corinne
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Nice work on this! Especially loved the first two stanzas.


Corinne
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15 posted 10-22-2004 10:18 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

I really enjoyed this.....Don't you wish this was what "war" was all about in real life?....
Drauntz
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how lovely a youth time but how deeply the war rooted.

enjoyed as always.

I have no idea why I missed those.
 
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