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Vertigo (babygirl & littlewing)

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littlewing
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0 posted 10-19-2004 04:11 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for littlewing


Tell me
again
why I
deserve
such space and time,
the physics
to fantasize  
deeply driven
darkened thoughts,
lying akimbo
in my Jesus Christ pose,
like a whirligig
spun out of control,  
crashing to burn
before I am set on fire.
Not unlike the sweetened blush of
a lone, fresh petal the
velveteen rush of
blood coming straight
through roots to air
brushing my lips,
moistening my cheek,
each petal soundly
sleeping . . .

a reverie

between one dream
and another, concealing
the source
in the deep-surge
of some aspen night,
how it takes,
how it cherishes,
the palewhite
slowfast moth
threads the burning pillars
of rosepetals, all split,
all spilt over the hour
of calm and silences
spill over your willing, dark throat,
lower now, shadows
cast no bodies but these,
beaten silver
with hands to arrest
this eternal moment,
in a semblance of black rain,
perishing into ache.

Tell me
again
out of what vehemence
could we slow
this vertigo...
© Copyright 2004 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 10-19-2004 04:14 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Well well... what a treat.

An absolutely fantabulous collab.

Well done both of you. I look forward to more.

into my library you both go.

Maree

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Enchantress
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2 posted 10-19-2004 04:19 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Excellent excellent write!
Well done and I hope to see more from the both of you.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 10-19-2004 04:20 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Not unlike the sweetened blush of
a lone, fresh petal the
velveteen rush of
blood coming straight
through roots to air
brushing my lips,
moistening my cheek,
each petal soundly
sleeping . . .

a reverie

between one dream
and another, concealing
the source
in the deep-surge
of some aspen night,
how it takes,
how it cherishes,
the palewhite
slowfast moth
threads the burning pillars
of rosepetals, all split,
all spilt over the hour
of calm and silences


very nice... very nice indeed!
IndigoEve
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4 posted 10-19-2004 04:24 PM       View Profile for IndigoEve   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IndigoEve

Tres belle.

I was looking forward to this, but didn't expect it so soon!

If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

babygirlwlove
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5 posted 10-19-2004 04:56 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

littlewing...

you are a true delight to dance with...thank you...

********************************************
and thanks to all of you for stopping by to witness our dance...

love&light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

vandana
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6 posted 10-19-2004 04:59 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

enjoyed
babygirlwlove
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7 posted 10-19-2004 05:02 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

A NOTE FROM Littlewing, who is having technical difficulties and no net connection at home....she wanted to make sure to thank everyone for stopping in to see this and for the warm replies...she will pop in as soon as electronically possible....

love&light,
**babygirl & littlewing**
Aenimal
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8 posted 10-19-2004 08:39 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Did not expect the write so soon, seemless write and hopefully one of many
babygirlwlove
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9 posted 10-19-2004 08:47 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

Aenimal...

we're the swift kids on the block...just waiting for you old folks to catch up...lol...

thanks for hitting this...
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

jwesley
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10 posted 10-19-2004 09:00 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Littlewing's long been a favorite of mine...
I added babygirl to that list tonight and then WOW . . . together!

Certainly happy I dropped by tonight...

jwesley
Aenimal
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11 posted 10-19-2004 09:03 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

As long as you're not the New Kids On The Block..shivers..

die 80's memories die!
wranx
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12 posted 10-19-2004 09:57 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

This is pretty much as expected..Thick and rich.

Quite a dance ladies!

"Velveteen" and "vehemence" in the same write, a conceit of each methinks.

And they said it couldn't be done...lol
littlewing
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13 posted 10-20-2004 01:09 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Maree . . . *smile* I am so happy you liked this, thank you

Thank you Nancy!

Ron, I am more than honored you liked.

Indigo!  Thank you so much!

Mari, YOU are the dancer here, m'friend, I only followed in your footsteps for a spell, I thank YOU for this and for leaving my message for me, too.  I have not seen someone with so much PUNCH like you have so seamless . . . thanks for wanting to write . . .

Thank you V!

Raph, thank you, I hope so too
(heh, didja see that?  She thinks you are older n' me ahahahaha plbbbbbbbbbbt )
What eighties?
(they never existed, shush)

hey J . . where have you been?  Thank you SO much . . .

Eddie, thank you . . . I am SO happy you liked.  *smile*

Thank you guys, in case I dont get back on . . .

babyg?   my honor . . .

GG
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14 posted 10-20-2004 02:03 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

Definitely a treat! I hope to read and witness some more of these dances soon.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

LeeJ
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15 posted 10-20-2004 07:46 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

terrific and powerfully done...wow...what a write, very much enjoyed...thank you for sharing...
babygirlwlove
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16 posted 10-20-2004 07:48 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

littlewing nah-ah...the honor was mine...and you made it very easy for me ((thank you))...

you are a doll...

so much love,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

babygirlwlove
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17 posted 10-20-2004 07:49 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

GG & Lee J...

thank you for dropping in on us...

**babygirL**
Aenimal
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18 posted 10-20-2004 03:41 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

sue, well she's mistaken i mean god, i don't think i'll even make it to be thaaaat old

ducks n covers
littlewing
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19 posted 10-21-2004 12:11 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

GG and Lee thank you SO much for reading

Babyg?  it was a pleasure to write with you,
it just fell together *smile*

excuse me while I toss tomatoes at Raph
*grin*

you said that YEARS ago . . . ehe

Thanks guys . . .
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20 posted 10-21-2004 02:38 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I love it when birds of a feather dance together (two of my very favorite people) that don't even know yet how alike they truly are.   Ladies, you do a mean word jive.
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21 posted 10-21-2004 03:06 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

now that's a duet to remember! What a tasty treat, an absolutely delightful blend of two wonderful artists. Take a bow, both of you.
(what the heck is a JC pose? LOL)
babygirlwlove
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22 posted 10-21-2004 06:33 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

Mysteria & Midnite...

thank you both so much!

much love,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

nakdthoughts
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23 posted 10-21-2004 02:32 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

a treat to read you both wthin these words

nicely done

M
littlewing
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24 posted 10-21-2004 04:13 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Thank you so much Sharon, Kacy and Maureen, My God much too good to us and me, always have been . . .

A Jesus Christ pose the way I meant was well, kind of tired, like JC was at the end . . . Soundgarden wrote a tune entitled that and it seemed to fit right here.

Thanks guys . . .
 
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