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quatro
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since 2003-04-29
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Galveston, Texas

0 posted 2004-10-19 01:47 PM




I look outside my window
at the gray-stained sky and watch
as the clouds roll in the wind.
Soon the rain will fall and bring
the cold that warms my soul
and makes my heart content.

With anticipation and now with content,
my warm breath clouds the window.
I’m elated at the fact my soul
no longer has to linger and watch
and wait for what the rain will bring.
Then suddenly with gentle force, arrives the wind.

Through the clouded glass I watch the wind
as it whistles through the trees and I am content.
Yes, the falling rain did bring
the cold and I touch the frosted window
with my finger.  I draw a heart and watch
the watery mist slide down the glass of my soul.

I exhale a sigh at the mirrored image of my soul
and grab a throw as I shiver with the wind
even though all I can do from here is watch
the seasons as they change my world and its content.
Living life through this shielded glass window
Often puts a glare on what life can bring

And I wonder what the next life will bring
when my time here has ended and my soul
has drifted through the stained glass window
and fluttered on the whispers of the wind.
Silently, as the hours tick on the watch
of father time, I reflect on my life’s content.

No longer will I sit and watch
and wait for what life will bring
to me or be forced to accept it's content
or that my life is without body or soul.
I am the air that I breathe.  I am the wind
that blows cold and leaves condensation on your window.

On the outside looking in through life’s window
I feel the damp and cold wind
blow and I await the departure of another soul.

quatro
10-19-04

This is my first attempt at a complicated style.  What say you?

© Copyright 2004 Naome James - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2004-10-19 01:58 PM


No longer will I sit and watch
and wait for what life will bring
to me or be forced to accept it's content
or that my life is without body or soul.
I am the air that I breathe.  I am the wind
that blows cold and leaves condensation on your window.


Yes Naome...understanding this all so well...
very well done.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-10-19 02:51 PM


it is a great pleasure to read someone who loves life so endearingly...realizing it is a gift...and we should make the most of our time here...no matter what perils or strife...it is our choice to live while here or walk with death, missing so very much.

Bravo!  Enjoyed

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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3 posted 2004-10-19 02:55 PM


Extremely well done...perfect style.
I very much enjoyed the read and the message.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

quatro
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since 2003-04-29
Posts 392
Galveston, Texas
4 posted 2004-10-19 04:07 PM


Gentle Spirit,
Thanks for reading and commenting.  I always look forward to hearing from you.

LeeJ,
Thank you as well for reading and commenting. It's always a pleasure to know that I have written something another person can understand.

Enchantress,
Thank you too for taking the time to read my work.

You are all a blessing!
quatro


passing shadows
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5 posted 2004-11-05 09:28 AM


a wonderfully done piece
I wouldn't even know where to begin to do a style like this

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6 posted 2004-11-05 08:49 PM


I like it...you wouldn't even be able to tell that this was your first try at this style!

~Alli~

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