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Dying Is A Holiday

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babygirlwlove
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0 posted 10-19-2004 06:58 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for babygirlwlove

Dying is a holiday,
aged along the soul's
longest days, to weigh
the intolerable epiphany
of easy virtue in vowels
and erosion, the ambrosia
of poems torn by the tongs
of flesh, a tune imagines
my slow reckoning of hairs
pulled out of the comb
of lost teeth, of scars
and the brevity of hours
devoured by leopards of jade,
so fades the laden mirror
filled with the diminutions
that echo on the page,
to bury themselves
under the ashes of passion,
light recedes from wounds
in the unreasonable solace
of tears, as they reiterate
mirror images
of dreams,
of dreams,
that leave me
unhealed, the night
now becomes a habit
of flesh, slashed by scimitars,
interminably trapped in syllables,
mirrors without end, end
in eternity as it bends
the entrails of steel, to the feel
of the delicate, clairvoyant body,
and blood becomes a burden
beyond the unendurable,
as light explodes
between each veterbra,
a torment of red chemo treatments
o p e n  the body
to the low breathing
of liquid holidays that fade
with the brevity
of these aged hours,
devoured by the pages
of my burning.

2004 copyright BbaygirLPress
:::I realize this is heavy...bear with me:::



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LeeJ
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1 posted 10-19-2004 07:12 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

bearing with you and standing there beside you, extending a quiet heart, shoulder and arms...

this was an extremely powerful write....
my thoughts are there with this extremely powerful and well versed poetess...

babygirlwlove
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2 posted 10-19-2004 07:23 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

Thank you Lee J....your warmth is deeply felt...

this one was difficult to compose in that the energy and spirit with which it is written is still raw...even more difficult to return to and read (for me)...but no less of a healing...

thanks again for the encouragement..

**babygirL**
Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 10-19-2004 07:26 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

We like heavy around here

and you are fast becoming the queen.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

babygirlwlove
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4 posted 10-19-2004 07:52 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

Susan~

thank you for the kind reply...

**babygirL**
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5 posted 10-19-2004 01:34 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

You know I could have commented on about every single thought written here, but won't.  Instead I will thank you for giving death a face.  Death has caused me to lose part of my soul, and I don't believe that anyone could do it justice as you have here.  Heavy?  Yes, and a heaviness that will surely weigh on your heart forever, if you let it.

"Dying is a holiday,
aged along the soul's
longest days,"

It was a holiday I prayed someone I loved to love go on every day, for longer than I will ever be able forget.

Heavy you say?  It had to be no other way.

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (10-19-2004 02:37 PM).]

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6 posted 10-19-2004 01:49 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

yes ma'am... for one so young you write with an age..and an understanding that speaks to your depths...

bravo... with a touch

babygirlwlove
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7 posted 10-19-2004 03:03 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

Mysteria

::tears:: I know you feel me...thank you...

**babygirL**
babygirlwlove
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8 posted 10-19-2004 03:05 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

Cpat~

w e l l....I ain't that young...lol..I have been gifted with a long line of youthful genes...and the pic you see is about 4 years old...little more quicksilver in the hair these days...lol

Thanks for stopping to see...inside...
**babygirL**
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9 posted 10-19-2004 03:10 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

(chuckling).. inside is where best to see... and yes ma'am.. you are that young... quicksilver or not..


I'll stand on my premise the depths belie the years..and as some would say and old soul resides within.
babygirlwlove
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10 posted 10-19-2004 03:15 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

lol...ok Cpat...I'll concede you the thought...and thank you (deeply)...but as they say:

it takes one, to know one...

P E A C E and O N E
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11 posted 10-19-2004 03:20 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

BG...get with it...everyone concedes, once or twice in their lifetime, to Cpat...

As for your poem, I felt this rawness, and admire your ability to glide through a poem with few commas or periods [and certainly no ellipses - my downfall].

You have an inner energy much to be admired.  And your old soul is showing...

[see?  those danged ellipses...]
babygirlwlove
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12 posted 10-19-2004 03:25 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

lol...thank you, Sunshine!

**babygirL**
Huan Yi
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13 posted 10-22-2004 12:19 AM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Huan Yi

Dead


I was the moon.

A shadow hid me
and I knew what it meant
not to be at all.

The moon in eclipse is sad
and sinless.
There is no passion in her plight.

Cold, unlighted,
moving in trance,
she comes to her station
or passes again to her place;

uncovers her loneliness:
eyeless behind no eyelids
has neither sleeping nor waking,
no body, parts, nor passions,
no loving, perceiving,
having, nor being;

moves only in a wayless night;

and drifting, as a ship without direction,
sinks into a forgotten depth,

among weeds,
among stones.


Rhoda Coghill

babygirlwlove
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14 posted 10-22-2004 06:38 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

huan yi...

thank you for your reply...

love&light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

TexUS
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15 posted 11-14-2004 11:02 PM       View Profile for TexUS   Email TexUS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TexUS

This one leaves me speechless, though, I just couldn't go away without acknowledging what an amazing poet you are.
babygirlwlove
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16 posted 11-15-2004 01:25 PM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

thank you, TexUS...

love&light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

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17 posted 11-18-2004 08:38 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

light recedes from wounds
in the unreasonable solace
of tears, as they reiterate
mirror images
of dreams,
of dreams,
that leave me
unhealed, the night
now becomes a habit
  damn...
Christopher
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18 posted 11-18-2004 10:40 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

love the "torn by the tongs of flesh"... so lyrical and catchy (next season's new jingle!) seriously though, while i can see the weight in this, it doesn't (to me) feel so heavy, more... openly reminiscent.

i like it, sits well as an after-breakfast snack.
babygirlwlove
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19 posted 11-22-2004 08:50 AM       View Profile for babygirlwlove   Email babygirlwlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for babygirlwlove

thanks for checking this out, christopher...

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

 
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