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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2004-10-19 02:55 AM


The mind of a woman
like a pendulum
sways between pencil
and pen and ink entries
in her journal of awareness.

Not too far away
the eraser of hope
lies in Cheshire cat repose
in anticipation of
a summons to perform
whilst the ruler of reality
smug in own importance
knows soon it must decree
the drawing of a line
underneath a dream.

The rain falls today;
it must be the rain
for it’s outside and not in
like distant fellowship
with the pain of love.

Drops of water mar her view,
sun mingles with the gray,
and she is kept within
encouraged by the chill
to pick up pen and ink
or similes of them,
erase what cannot be,
and rule off happiness.

The mind of a woman
has lost the beat of time
but the tools of moving on
pitter patter in her brain
when the rain falls
outside and not in!


© Copyright 2004 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2004-10-19 02:00 PM


Helen~
I am applauding this piece as being one of the finest offerings this poetry forum has ever had posted !!!

You took my heart on a tour of 'The mind of a woman' ... and I am here to tell you that it touched me like no other piece has done for a long, long time~


You are pretty awesome, poetess~
I will always thank you for this~

I'm keeping it in a special corner of my library~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2004-10-19 02:01 PM


Marge said it best...
this is a


A most definate keeper....
very well done Helen...

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

LeeJ
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Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-10-19 02:49 PM


applauding this fine master piece.



a pleasure to read bring warmth to the heart

Honeybunch
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4 posted 2004-10-19 05:41 PM


Marge - Thank you so much for your most uplifting comment.  I must confess to being overwhelmed - perhaps I should read it again.  

GS and LeeJ - Thank you both so much for the read and your kind comments.

Skyfire
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Riding
5 posted 2004-10-19 06:34 PM


Bravo! Love it I do ^_^

and then He created the horse...

Flutterwings
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Maine
6 posted 2004-10-31 09:25 AM


You've entered the mind of many with this very fine work of poetic art. It is not the kind of poetry you read once and are satisfied with..... you read it over and over and every time a vision appears. Well done my friend. Keep your Muse busy it is very inspirational. Love and peace, Maggie ((~.~))


Martie
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7 posted 2004-10-31 09:34 AM


Helen

"The mind of a woman
has lost the beat of time
but the tools of moving on
pitter patter in her brain
when the rain falls
outside and not in!"

The tools for moving on, those really are the trick, I think.  Again, you are so wonderfully wise, my friend.  I'm sorry I missed this before, but a little angel turned me back to find it..thank you, Marge/angel/sis!  

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2004-10-31 10:01 AM


an absolutely amazing piece of poetry. I love it!!
Betty
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9 posted 2004-10-31 10:20 AM


I do love this piece. It is excellent.
Betty

Honeybunch
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10 posted 2004-10-31 02:48 PM


In case anyone comes back here again I just want you all to know that I very much appreciate your kind comments.  Thank you!
Broken_Winged_Angel
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Small Town, Somewhere
11 posted 2004-10-31 11:34 PM


Marge has definitely said it best.

This one is one to keep for a long time

Thank you for sharing it with us.

BWA

PatAngel
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since 2004-04-05
Posts 451
California
12 posted 2004-11-01 09:42 AM


~Helen~

I am in awe! This is absolutely wonderful. It touches the heart of all women! Thank you for sharing this brilliant piece of work.

Patricia

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

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