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Dreams Die Young
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Dreams Die Young |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Everything means nothing when I measure it with grace and lies just seemed so beautiful, there, resting on your face. Some acoustic kind of cadence dressed up storms in green and blue, and it made your words seem wonderful, though none of them were true. I spun myself within them. Like a fool, I believed. Left hanging in your shadow, now, forgotten and deceived. Pain can last but dreams die young, and hope is stretched too thin. I pulled it too far, now it's frail in the wind. He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. [This message has been edited by GG (10-19-2004 05:16 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OH, I feel this one, and it hurts. It hurts when you let somone in so close, and then they pull back. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A very touching write of love and loss but I often ask myself who really gains in the long run - the one who opens or the one who closes? |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
painful but youve written this so well, that the ache almost feels comforting..... maybe because i know this place as well  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Alyssa, I've missed you I wish I could be here more good to read you again no matter if it's a painful read  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Alyssa, I'm taken by your poem. "I spun myself within them. Like a fool, I believed. Left hanging in your shadow, now, forgotten and deceived." This year, I learned something about shadows. There is more to a shadow than meets the eye. It is sooooooo good to read you again, my Alyssan friend. You are a very special poetess! cathy |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Alyssa, this is your best. nothing has hit me this hard in a long while, thanks for giving voice to thoughts. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Alyssa, this caught me right off: and lies just seemed so beautiful, there, resting on your face. God, so many times I have seen just that Beautiful writing. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
GG, so good to see you and read you again... enjoyed the read...and yup yup yup, sometimes we will believe anything, b/c "we" are so in need...hey, I did...but, I learned one heck of a lesson to boot...me in the butt...smiles and hugs....I hope everyone reads this...great write! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhAlyssa~ How very gently this weeps the page~ I just love this piece dearest poetess~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Midnitesun, definitely does. But it seems that it happens to us all at some point... thank you for your reply. Honey, I guess really it depends. We always gain by letting them in, but there are a certain few times when we could gain more by never having stepped out there. Maybe I'm just a bit burnt, though  Thank you...Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
muted, Thank you so much! Very kind words. But I'm sorry you know the place so well =-/ Dix, you're here more then me lately, and I've missed you so much, too. loveyaAlways, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Cathy, I sure hope they're good things... because so far it isn't seeming all too great a place. It's good to be back here again. Though I fear it won't be as long as I'd like... life has a way of stealing time away. It's like time passes every second or something, crazy huh? thank you for your words.raph, wow, what a huge compliment. Thank you very much. Hope things are well for you... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
littlewing, I know it's definitely something I've seen on many people. It's so much easier to believe them, and live in that fantasy, even if just for awhile. Thanks for your reply, love hearing from you LeeJ, I fear we all learn that lesson. Over and over and over again. Maybe someday we'll all have people there for us enough that we don't 'need' those beautiful lies anymore. Never hurt to dream, right? Great hearing from you, thanks for the reply.Marge, you're always so sweet! Thank you much dear lady Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Brooding The sadness of our lives. We will never be good enough to each other, to our parents and friends. We go along like old sailing ships, loaded with food and drink for the long voyage, self-sufficient, without any outside contact with the world. The truth faces me all the time. We are in a world in which nobody listens to anybody, in which we do as we please until we are stopped by others. We live our whole lives as in a husk, which keeps us separate from any influence. While those who reflect the influence of others are either idiots, or people who never gained consciousness. David Ignatow |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Huan, I love how you take the time to offer such powerful words. There is a lot of truth in them... I only wish there were more who could break the cycle. Thank you for the words... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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