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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio

0 posted 2004-10-18 02:28 PM



Departing on this ashen dawn,
their spread of wings
across on the sky,

upon the sycamores
they soon repose, abandonning
the frost that climbs,
on vines where summer blooms
had grown,

and in remiss upon
their fading song,
the darkfaced windows
view the morn,

around a single branch
such exit and arrival twine,

my unshed body waits,
for now,
a mere dividing line.

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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
1 posted 2004-10-18 02:35 PM


ohhhhhh

this is outstanding!!

love it!



"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
2 posted 2004-10-18 02:48 PM


Very nice write gal...but I know better..you "shaved it" just for me..right?
muted
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
3 posted 2004-10-18 02:51 PM


i giggle at Toe...

but
incredible write..i think my favourite of yours thus far


inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio
4 posted 2004-10-18 05:27 PM


thanks
i wasnt so sure about it; but thanks for the support
toe is a silly goose isn't he?

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
5 posted 2004-10-18 05:45 PM


Just like you said before, Michele
the Leaf Goddess for sure . . .

this is beautiful

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
6 posted 2004-10-18 06:33 PM


This poem sounds as good as it reads. I enjoyed reading it out loud.

Tree
Warm, autumnal hugs,
EA

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
7 posted 2004-10-18 06:59 PM


Oh my gosh!!  This is SO beautiful!
Love it Michele!
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

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