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Open Poetry #33

Beneath the Fall

Contabo
Member

since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

0 posted 2004-10-17 09:12 PM

Yes, I got this title from snow. I offer an apology to her.

Beneath the Fall (Autumn)

Serotonin…
the edge of life’s precipice diminishing
without pause into seasons altered
black; cold bloodletting rituals
raking flesh off limbs howling
out from treeless tundra vicious
with a cold Winter solstice taunting
my demise; a Woodhenge shadowed
frost-line, bony finger pointing figure
beneath the fall.

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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
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1 posted 2004-10-17 10:58 PM

ohhh I just love this....very vivid piece....

you say so little in such beautiful words, and I can see it!

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Contabo
Member

since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

2 posted 2004-10-17 11:05 PM

I so much appreciate a poet such as yourself reading and commenting on my feeble attempts.

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jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

3 posted 2004-10-18 02:55 PM

wow, powerful...fall has always seemed depressing in a way to me, and now for me is doomed to forever be so........very powerful

Contabo
Member

since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

4 posted 2004-10-18 04:07 PM

Thank you JB.

As an admirer of your postings, I am humbled.

I too know the death that autumn brings to the grave of winter.

hmmm...I like those words.

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Wolf777
Junior Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 20

5 posted 2004-10-18 08:41 PM

Snow was right to lead me to your words. She has excellent taste in well written poetry.

Contabo
Member

since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

6 posted 2004-10-19 06:57 PM

be careful playing "follow the leader"

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