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No Words For Love
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No Words For Love |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City 
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What I couldn't say, words that came way too close to the textures of your patience, the radiance of love, sudden and given to slay such brilliant echoes in the mind, still to let it lie still, love that was evident and pent by the slender darkness that now cradles my limbs in its tender raiment of thirst, as a tremor crosses over my slivered haunch, weakened at your insistance, encripted upon the vigilance of wind, and what I couldn't touch, much the same presence, opaque, a mere reflection of love given to the wind, written with sand by the hand in silence, impatient gestures bound over limbs, wounds at last grow mammoth and clothe me in a sabbath of thirst, the worst of it still tender to the lips, less vigilant now, no words for love to shelter. 2004 copyright BabygirLPress |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I read this several times - it is textured and layered and the words intrigue - no words adequate here - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"a mere reflection of love given to the wind, written with sand by the hand in silence," ~ That is downright poetic!!!  EA |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Susan... thank you for stopping in on this...and for your kind reply...your touch on the page is featherlight...yet deeply felt... **babygirL** |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
EA~ thank you love... **babygirL** |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
babygirl...how do you do this? I've been reading you...you find the words for feelings for which I thought there are no words... Your boundless ability of expression and the intensity with which you write are what draw me in to read you. enjoying... K |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thickly layered thirsting VERY nicely written! |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
K~ It is the only way I know how to breathe....thank you for reading me... **babygirL** |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wranx... thanks for hitting this... **babygirL** |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
No words, but these. Thanks, coyote 8) |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
hey, thanks coyote... **babygirL** |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I give you one of my words for love...silky...James |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Superb write TD |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Beautiful poem...and wow! You already have 200 posts in only 6 days.  Once again, amazing poem...  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
thank you all for stopping in on this...I am truly enjoying myself here at PIP...this is a fantastic forum! **babygirL** |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
given to the wind, written with sand by the hand in silence, impatient gestures bound over limbs, wounds at last grow mammoth and clothe me in a sabbath of thirst, the worst of it still tender to the lips, less vigilant now, no words for love to shelter. love the imagery here and the undertones.... nicely done ma'am.. indeed... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Cpat~ thanks for digging this outta the ground...your eyes on here...somehow...so soothing...((thank you)) **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
been reading your offerings here... I enjoy talent... and I enjoy one who can put into words the images and the feelings that are so often difficult to pin down..the ellusive and the concrete mixed by you... hold well to the challenge... you have both talent... and the ability to weave gossamer into steel. now..I'll leave you be..lol.. before you think I am as bad as Toe.. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
C~ ummm no one is as bad as Toe...lol...(Toe, you know i love you)... Thank you for you kind, kind words and for your interest in my lunacy...lol...Please SEE ME "Behind Closed Doors", In the Mature forum....some of my more recent work is posted there...and feel free to e-me at babygirlpress00@aol.com...I have some links you may enjoy... I enjoy your energy, as much...and admire your talent with the fingerpaints of the souL... p e a c e and o n e **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Contabo Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159 |
I too have been reading.....why do you not want critiques?? Contabo |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Contabo... Thank you for taking the time to read me...it is much appreciated...as for the critiques...simply because I do very little revision of my work at all...How you see it is pretty much how it was born....it is a raw exhalation of whatever emotion(s) I am feeling...in the moment, and that's how I present it....raw...and in the moment... love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
the ability to weave gossamer into steel. EXACTLY! Well said and more than well written babyg. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
littlewing... thank you, love... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Contabo Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159 |
Ok, I understand raw and in the moment.... But is that what the GREAT poets did?? Just scribble down whatever came to them in the moment?? I think not. I believe that exhaustive thought must go into poetry. No poem "comes" out perfect. PIP is deteriorating into a posting frenzy that has no meaning to true poetry. Unfortunately, I think that your presence is adding to that. Please post ONE poem per day and comment meaningly to 3 others for every one post of yours. I am going to bring this to the attention of moderators. Thank you for the response. Contabo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) exhaustive thought??? Contabo.. surely there is more to poetry than exhaustive thought.. and that even great poets wrote from heart and soul... My friend... poetry is the soul, through words expressed and images painted... why do you seem to take umbrance with someone who is showing both, poetry and soul? |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Contabo... I am sorry you seem to be at odds with the posting regulations in this forum...I find it amusing that you have taken it upon yourself to attempt to dictate how & how often and with what depth I, or anyone else on this board should respond to posts... Your opinion is irrelevant, as far as I'm concerned...and I couldn't care less whether or not you read anything I write...so if the volume of my posts is what's bothering you...just don't click on them...and focus on exhausting your efforts on your own work. P E A C E and O N E **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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