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Martie

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0 posted 2004-10-16 12:15 PM

Music From the Corner of Goodnight

I think that I fell on the slip side of real
holding the root of something I feel
with the dirt clawing me
with decision or drowning
for all that I know I’m not sure who is foundling

Blisters and blemish are up in the sky
and the sound of mad cannons
make a pulse that could die
they are groaning and grating in cosmic repair
lifting my voice with the groan of despair

Now the dear shade of darkness
is fumbled and warm
to the soft of my pillow I now comfort forlorn
and grow from the meadow within my own keep
where the fall has let down
giving warm wood my weep

To the places that time has made smooth as a rock
I take hold and rub raw with my fingers the clock
for the sounds that I hear have turned grumble to night
and the sweet breathing bubble still holds to its flight

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J.Samm
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1 posted 2004-10-16 12:22 PM

"To the places that time has made smooth as a rock"

i love how you blend words into images...awww, the poem made me feel as forlorn...good write!

Larry C

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2 posted 2004-10-16 12:25 PM

Martie,
I think I was there once or twice...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

passing shadows
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displaced

3 posted 2004-10-16 12:40 PM

how sadly beautiful

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

4 posted 2004-10-16 01:20 AM

beautiful words and flow, you never fail to amaze

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2004-10-16 01:24 AM

you never fail to amaze me either Martie girl

it's a keeper.

Mxx

cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

~ani difranco~

Mysteria

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6 posted 2004-10-16 01:38 AM

Night Martie, and me either

I saw a Lava clock?

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2004-10-16 07:43 AM

Now the dear shade of darkness
is fumbled and warm
to the soft of my pillow I now comfort forlorn
and grow from the meadow within my own keep
where the fall has let down
giving warm wood my weep

I have slept with this same pillow many, many times Martie. sigh....
as always, I love your writings. Hugs dear.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2004-10-16 10:21 AM

MartieSis~
The title alone ... is pure poetry~
The rest is delicate Martiesque~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2004-10-16 10:34 AM

Holding in knowing...

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2004-10-16 10:36 AM

Martie
You are one of a kind.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

11 posted 2004-10-16 10:40 AM

Beautiful Martie..hauntingly beautfiul.
This one will stay with me all day.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

babygirlwlove
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12 posted 2004-10-16 10:53 AM

this is hallmark beauty and form...lyrical...

much enjoyed,
**babygirL**

icebox
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in the shadows

13 posted 2004-10-16 06:50 PM

Well done my friend!

Margherita
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Eternity

14 posted 2004-10-16 06:56 PM

This "music from the Corner of Goodnight" is deeply touching.

Outstanding poetry.

Love and hugs. Margherita

kayjay
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15 posted 2004-10-16 11:23 PM

The Corner of Goodnight...what a beautiful place to rest. well done! Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Ratleader

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16 posted 2004-10-17 10:23 AM

I've been looking at this poem off-and-on since Friday, wishing each time that I could find the thread of hope in it and weave that thread into an answer that would lift your spirit.

I failed.... Martie the sense of desolation in this poem leaves me breathless. It's Sunday now, the day when hope is supposed to dawn. My own hope is that it does for you.

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17 posted 2004-10-17 03:54 PM

This..was amazing. You have such a talent for writing.

~Alli~

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mysticpoe
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18 posted 2004-10-17 04:12 PM

Great imagery here Martie. Very nice.

wayne

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then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Magnus

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19 posted 2004-10-17 04:35 PM

Awesomely written...love the flow and feel
of the lines...not too shabby dear one...

Goodknight
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20 posted 2004-10-18 08:34 PM

Martie - this is so deeply presented - it reveals struggles from deep and makes my heart ache for the deep feelings you reveal - Paul

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