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Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19
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0 posted 2004-10-14 09:36 AM



I sleep to wake
and feel those words
across the miles
knowing some links
are better than none.

I dedicate my smiles to you,
if needed and confess
they are painted on
through broken tears
and while silence is the order of the day
and I begin to lose the weight of the world
(or at least that of my own),
I would see in your eyes
that which you never could,
and know in your voice
that which never crossed your lips
and so I must lie to myself
to allow this untitled romance to keep...

I've been lost in the moment,
or so the mirror shows,
the darker side for now taking over
sometimes to torment
other times to remind me
that we are all strangers
trying to find ourselves
and how little a request can remain...
unanswered.

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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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1 posted 2004-10-14 10:09 AM


Outstanding..I not only enjoyed this very much I feel like I have lived it.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2004-10-14 10:42 AM


You've tumbled me down the rabbit's warren again...

well done, m'friend.

muted
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3 posted 2004-10-15 06:20 AM


"I've been lost in the moment,
or so the mirror shows,
the darker side for now taking over
sometimes to torment
other times to remind me
that we are all strangers
trying to find ourselves
and how little a request can remain...
unanswered."

losing yourself in the moment, we all do this...but knowing that a moment is fleeting..and you wont be lost for long...you still can easily fall into the next moment and so on...until you find what is eternal.
patience
persistence

your writing is mesmerizing

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180
New York City
4 posted 2004-10-15 07:00 AM


"I dedicate my smiles to you,
if needed and confess
they are painted on
through broken tears"

wow...there is so awesome poetry hitting this board....

great stuff!
**babygirL**

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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5 posted 2004-10-15 06:18 PM


I've been lost in the moment,
or so the mirror shows,
the darker side for now taking over
sometimes to torment
other times to remind me
that we are all strangers
trying to find ourselves
and how little a request can remain...
unanswered.


Hell yeah, I agree with babygirl....

Awesome.

Maree


cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

~ani difranco~

Ratleader
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6 posted 2004-10-16 10:18 AM


I sleep to wake
and feel those words
across the miles
knowing some links
are better than none.

Sitting here in the dim of morning, I mean, sitting HERE, being HERE....I feel this as well as know.

This poem was worth joining PIP to find.

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