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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2004-10-14 02:02 AM


Your sweet kiss
oh how do I miss
the graze in the way
you touched me so nice

The man I seen is not there
no not even twice.His face was
warm, yours is not,his hands were
gental not cold as stone.

The greatness that was once
you is left out alone, where
did you go? how did you see?
where is that man that was
just made for me

What did I do? what did I say?
please tell me what I did to
make him go away..


Tears on my pillows pain in
my thoughts, I just want you to
like me.. like you did from the
start.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


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Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2004-10-14 02:12 AM



Tears on my pillows pain in
my thoughts, I just want you to
like me.. like you did from the
start.
****************

I enjoyed the whole poem, but that last verse impacts with a question that so many can relate to.  I have wondered that one myself before and don't know if I will ever find out the answer.  Very nice read and it carries well from line to line and verse to verse.  

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2004-10-14 03:19 AM


Well said!  Yes, many can relate to your thoughts here.
Foxyoasis
Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
3 posted 2004-10-14 03:35 AM


if he only knew my pain would he care probally not he isnt him anymore..

meh life goes on thanks guys

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2004-10-14 07:12 PM


Sad when you have something special and it goes away...James
Foxyoasis
Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
5 posted 2004-10-15 04:02 AM


men suck but on the bright side i get going creative juices following i only wish they were nice im so tired of writting sorrow
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