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Velvet Crinkling
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Velvet Crinkling |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Velvet Crinkling I wore my skin inside out and walked around on egg shells thinking you might fall in the hollow and break your heart choked on a voice I once had that became foreign to me dancing too close to the edges of a desire never allowed to know the grabbing of the velvet crinkling or touch the lace so loosely attached I never saw myself as a disappointment but I am so much better at being the champion of other’s causes all along I thought I was trying to save you when I was the one standing in water too deep I do not blame you nothing happened that I did not allow but you are just so wrong doors have two ways of going and this one now closes and what is lost is much more than time |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Velvet Crinkling I wore my skin inside out and walked around on egg shells thinking you might fall in the hollow and break your heart choked on a voice I once had that became foreign to me dancing too close to the edges of a desire never allowed to know the grabbing of the velvet crinkling or touch the lace so loosely attached I never saw myself as a disappointment but I am so much better at being the champion of other’s causes all along I thought I was trying to save you when I was the one standing in water too deep I do not blame you nothing happened that I did not allow but you are just so wrong doors have two ways of going and this one now closes and what is lost is much more than time ……………………………. Helen, Good. John |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
doors have two ways of going and this one now closes and what is lost is much more than time This simply seeps sadness... and wisdom learned at a high price. Excellent! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And what, I ask, is this beautiful poem doing way down here??? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"doors have two ways of going and this one now closes and what is lost is much more than time" wow....such emotion in this one  |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
oh...poignant closure... feeling you... *8babygirL** |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
deeply painful powerfully poignant penetrating PERFECTION Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
As always you echo ache, hugs slick one |
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