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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

0 posted 2004-10-13 03:27 PM








Swirled Anticipation


Arm cradle held back to chest against the 2 a.m. breeze
Where platinum sweeps the brows of mesmerize intent
Souls bound in the imprints of hearts resting on knees
Between the inclines of passion and an embrace ascent

Siren songs longing for the lyrics of two lost in ecstasy
Written in cyan harmony against a horizon of afterglow
Where truth becomes spiral in it's tilt of whisper fantasy
Laced with dolphin encore answering ovations in tempo

Captured caress resonates in arch of surrendering touch
Framed audience of constellations seated front row sigh
Rippled bliss nurturing pools of palmed desire as such
When outstretch of fingers linger in Jupiter’s hidden eye

Quivers of promise relinquish chaired visions of release
Planets align to the chorus of whispers sent aloft tonight
Swirled anticipation reclines against a shadow of peace
As passion turns the breath of Venus loose to it’s flight

Mark Christopher


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1 posted 2004-10-13 03:32 PM


Captured caress resonates in arch of surrendering touch
Framed audience of constellations seated front row sigh
Rippled bliss nurturing pools of palmed desire as such
When outstretch of fingers linger in Jupiter’s hidden eye


I enjoyed this verse the most Mark, but must say the images and visuals you leave the reader with are breathtaking!  Very well done.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-10-13 03:33 PM


Cowboy, you've certainly not lost your touch...

these lines were quicksilver mecurial...
and all that it would imply...

straight to the soul, this poem.

We've missed you.  Stay awhile.  Take your boots off...

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3 posted 2004-10-13 03:36 PM


"Quivers of promise relinquish chaired visions of release
Planets align to the chorus of whispers sent aloft tonight
Swirled anticipation reclines against a shadow of peace
As passion turns the breath of Venus loose to it’s flight"

Exquisite writing Mark..love the above stanza especially.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

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4 posted 2004-10-13 03:51 PM


Quivers of promise relinquish chaired visions of release
Planets align to the chorus of whispers sent aloft tonight
Swirled anticipation reclines against a shadow of peace
As passion turns the breath of Venus loose to it’s flight


Mark Christopher? I have missed reading you Sir. Like Karilea said...please stay a while.

Sending this beauty to my library

Maree

cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

~ani difranco~

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5 posted 2004-10-13 04:11 PM


Okay I may look stupid but here goes, do you realize I had read that twice before I even realized it rhymed - now that is rhyme.  Absolutely beautiful work.  Only one other on this site can fool me that way.
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6 posted 2004-10-13 04:17 PM


Framed audience of constellations seated front row sigh

Yeppers. *G* Beautiful images of romance... written in classic MC style... well done! *S*



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
7 posted 2004-10-13 05:30 PM


Donna - Thank you very much and thank you also for letting me know which verse you liked best, as that helps me grow as a poet.  Glad you enjoyed.

Sunshine - Planned on staying, been here but reckon you been on the road.  Thanks, glad you enjoyed.

Nancy - I appreciate the exquisite very much and I am happy you found a verse that stuck to you.  Thank you

Maree - In your library is and honor and I greatly appreciate that as well as you.  Thank you dearly.

Mysteria - Wasn't trying to fool ya, honest.  You flatter me greatly.  I am elated you enjoyed this one and I thank you.

   PS - As for you looking stupid???? NEVER dear poetess.  

Suthern Gal - So happy you enjoyed and thank you for letting me know which line you liked best.  Thanks also for peeking in.

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2004-10-13 06:29 PM


I am not supposed to say this
but..
very romantic view of a guy at a foot ball game..grin

you are a pro amigo!!

very kewl

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9 posted 2004-10-13 07:22 PM


"Captured caress resonates in arch of surrendering touch"

*sigh* listening to the echo of breathless sighs

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10 posted 2004-10-13 07:30 PM


Souls bound in the imprints of hearts

~a wish~

A

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11 posted 2004-10-13 07:37 PM


It's a joy to read you again Mark Christopher.


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12 posted 2004-10-13 07:54 PM


Maga~
You still have the bestest thoughts~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Sunshine
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13 posted 2004-10-13 08:03 PM


Yes, DS....

he IS a pro...


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14 posted 2004-10-13 11:29 PM


Mark

You write the night and rhyme it with love...and make amazing!  

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
15 posted 2004-10-14 01:31 AM



DS - Yes, and I love it when the game goes into overtime. Poet Reading  Others to learn.  Thanks so much kind sir.

Kacy - Hoping you have your own to listen to.  Thanks for the visit.

Alicethruglass - A dream that can come true.  Thanks for stopping by.

Serenity - And it is a joy to be read by you.  Thank you dearly.

Marge - I do try to keep the thoughts that make me happiest. Thank you

Sunshine - ?????????????

Martie - You know me well enough to know that love writes me and I do thank you much my dear friend.  Always a pleasure to see your name whether it be your post or a response on mine.  Your cherished.

Susan Caldwell
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16 posted 2004-10-14 08:09 AM


Wonderful Mark!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
17 posted 2004-10-14 10:07 AM


Susan - Thank you.  Glad you enjoyed.
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18 posted 2004-10-14 11:00 AM



Where platinum sweeps the brows of mesmerize intent

Between the inclines of passion and an embrace ascent
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Written in cyan harmony against a horizon of afterglow

Where truth becomes spiral in it's tilt of whisper fantasy
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Framed audience of constellations seated front row sigh

When outstretch of fingers linger in Jupiter’s hidden eye

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Quivers of promise relinquish chaired visions of release

Swirled anticipation reclines against a shadow of peace

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I need to find new adjectives and accolades to describe your poetry...my mothy vocabulary fails to do justice to such lovely dreamscape images...
You paint us a panaramic view with your ever impressive style...
I know I say this with each write...but the personifications are just so awesome...the personif added to the mix of metaphor and high inspire imagery, wrapped in your romantic rhymed intend is the heart of your writing.

you write love poetry on the stars ...
you tint the dawn with anticipation...

Written in cyan harmony against a horizon of afterglow

Where truth becomes spiral in it's tilt of whisper fantasy



those lines serve proof to my point..
they are pure poetic perfection.
Absolute...Awesome...
dont doubt the moth.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
19 posted 2004-10-14 04:40 PM


JM -  No need for questions on your reply.  I thank you dearly and you know that.  You always allow me the perspective from anothers view though it be a little bias in there. LOL    You know I appreciate your replies but what I do appreciate more is the what we have grown together since meeting in here.  Seems that is getting rarer by the moment these days so never doubt just how much the cherish goes.  Love ya my friend even if your wings are a little scorched now and then.  
Janet Marie
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20 posted 2004-10-14 05:01 PM


now you know I never doubt an Aquarian.  



~~~~~



Susan
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21 posted 2004-10-14 07:27 PM


Mark- this is a lovely piece - you've captured the celestial beauty and romance of the stars and planets - nothing quite like the sky to inspire, is there -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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22 posted 2004-10-14 07:37 PM


Very nice...James
Janet Marie
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23 posted 2004-10-14 11:28 PM


*moth happy dance*





( I knew I could find just the right pic for that line.)

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24 posted 2004-10-15 01:03 AM


Mark

I always enjoy reading your words for you paint the most vivid pictures.  Your writing style is so unique.

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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25 posted 2004-10-15 11:40 AM


"Siren songs longing for the lyrics of two lost in ecstasy
Written in cyan harmony against a horizon of afterglow
Where truth becomes spiral in it's tilt of whisper fantasy
Laced with dolphin encore answering ovations in tempo"


Well, JM stole my response.  (Yes, I was gonna say ALL that...lol)  So I'll just say this is one of the coolest verses I've read in a tiger's age...  
BTW...You up for some target practice here soon????  

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26 posted 2004-10-15 02:40 PM


Written in cyan harmony against a horizon of afterglow
Where truth becomes spiral in it's tilt of whisper fantasy
Laced with dolphin encore answering ovations in tempo


whoooo hooo, encore please
this was magical...a tremendous write
soft, lovely, natures true meaning of love
and you've painted it with a song of heart.

Lovely


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
27 posted 2004-10-15 04:41 PM


JM - Somehow I knew you were going to find a way to post a few graphics and you found some beauties.  Thanks sweets for being so good to me always.

Susan - The sky and a love make it very easy to find inspiration.  Thank you dearly for your visit and comments.  

James - Thank you kind sir.

Sue - It's been awhile but so very happy to see you here.  Thank you very much for your always generous and kind comments.

Duncan - Well look at all the typing JM saved you from having to do.  I know how much you hate to type anyway beings you type with your toes and all.  Thank you for letting me know which verse and lines you liked most.  That coming from you is almost as much a treat as watching you try to get off that porch of yours. LOL  As for the target practice ... well you know I am always ready for that.     

LeeJ - WOW !!! thanks for that excitement.  I think I can pretty much promise that there will be some encores to come still.  Thank you so very much for those words.  I appreciate them much.


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28 posted 2004-10-15 05:07 PM


Expansive, soul-touching, and grand! I twirled in your swirling words.

How could I help but love a poem with Venus and Jupiter and dolphins in it?!?

Universal Love & Light,
Linda

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29 posted 2004-10-15 05:09 PM


that's awesome!

dang!

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
30 posted 2004-10-15 05:51 PM


Linda - How could any man complain about having an angel twirl?  Thank you dearly for the visit and your always kind words.

passing shadows - Thank you very much.


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31 posted 2004-10-16 09:05 PM


Mark,
It took many reads to decide what I liked the best...and I couldn't, because the all is so excellent...

But this...

..."Quivers of promise relinquish chaired visions of release
Planets align to the chorus of whispers sent aloft tonight
Swirled anticipation reclines against a shadow of peace
As passion turns the breath of Venus loose to it’s flight"

Oh, what an amazing view!
TD

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
32 posted 2004-10-17 09:49 AM


ThisDiamond - I very much appreciate the comments and that you found it worthy of more than one read. I am also pleased you found the view amazing.  Thank you very much.
Titia Geertman
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33 posted 2004-10-17 06:19 PM


You know, reading an English poem is almost as difficult as writing one, at least for me that is, because I'm lacking a huge vocabulary. But can grasp quite well the meaning intended here and I read all the replies and then read the poem again.

But even not knowing the meaning of all the words doesn't bother me at all, because your lines are so well formed that just reading them is a pleasure in itself.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

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34 posted 2004-10-17 07:56 PM


You do have a way with words.

Some of my faves..."against the 2 a.m. breeze", "audience of constellations seated front row sigh", "nurturing pools"

I could have listed the whole poem.

Nicely done indeed, Mark.


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
35 posted 2004-10-18 09:38 AM


Titia - Well I for one think you do quite well as I have read your poems also for years and will continue to do so.  I do appreciate you taking the time to re-read and just want to say thank you dearly.  Your visits are always a treat.

Chanson - Thank you very much dear lady and also for picking your fav lines.  Glad to see you back in here.

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36 posted 2004-10-19 10:18 AM


Hi Mark, good to see you, I am rarely on anymore, but was happy to see your name, and read your ravishingly beautiful words.
Sandra

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37 posted 2004-10-19 01:32 PM


wow...I was swept up in all this!

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
38 posted 2004-10-19 04:03 PM


Sandra - Hello and good to see you also.  Thank you so much for the visit.

babygirlwlove - Thank you, glad you liked.


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