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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2004-10-06 02:00 AM



If it were me I would wait
consult, wait...
deliberate
disturbances from dosed sleep
lethal in small quantities
just to warn of an already sealed fate
as soldiers negate death's checkmate...


for me, I'd keep applying a phlebo
to observe lifelines undisturbed
listen for an encouraging word..
heaven help me
if I have to pull a plug
to have to see a heart rate slow
slowed to almost unbearable murmur


then it would be too late to revive
medidate to reanimate
repeal the course of fate
cause I'd slackened the wire
disconnected a current choice
kept the patient safe for another day
unhurt patients have the time to question
and I'd question the state of my patience.




[This message has been edited by ecrivan (10-06-2004 07:15 PM).]

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1 posted 2004-10-06 07:26 AM


wow dont know how to respond to this one. good write


ecrivan
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2 posted 2004-10-06 07:14 PM


the last line was in tatters had to rewrite that and a decent ending...


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