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Midnitesun
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0 posted 2004-10-05 07:51 PM



Hearing the walls scream
  echoing your voice
does not help me
  sleep at night.

But I would have it
no other way.

For to forget you

would be the death of my soul
and I’m not ready to go.

But some nights the walls
scream too loud
forcing me into fetal curl
in remembering

how you held me
before the walls
came crashing down.

Ironically,
I had always believed
the image of
walls coming down
would be
positive.

© Copyright 2004 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2004-10-05 07:58 PM


Kacy

Feeling this needs a hug.  

Midnitesun
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2 posted 2004-10-05 08:11 PM



This was written about a friend, a firefighter who died on the job when the ceiling and walls collapsed, trapping him.

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3 posted 2004-10-05 10:06 PM


"But I would have it
no other way.
For to forget you
would be the death of my soul
and I’m not ready to go."


Midnite..
Understanding this...I don't like to forget people...don't like to lose people..the people in our lives are so important--they fill us with the things we need to be who we are! (Even after they're gone...)

nice write

hugs, g

"Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw)

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4 posted 2004-10-05 10:08 PM


Oh...wow...I just did read what you said this was written about...gave me chills...my husband is a firefighter....I don't like to think about this possibility much...

g

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5 posted 2004-10-05 10:39 PM


Thank you for reading, MsVarner. No matter what job a loved one does, when they disappear from your life, it is devastating. And because firefighting is a higher than average risk job, perhaps you strive to cherish each moment even more. Heart hugs to you both, and please thank him for his willingness to be a lifesaver. I don't know what else to say. My friend Jim was special, and everyone who knew him knew he lived a very full and giving life, and was always the first one to jump into the middle of the scene.
And I know his wife, my friend, misses him every single moment, no doubt even more intensely each night when the walls close in.

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2004-10-07 12:51 PM


Nice writing...hugs...James
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7 posted 2004-10-07 02:44 AM


"They" keep trying to assure me that the walls should come down too. Hard to believe when you're being pummeled by bricks tho.



'cause I know.

icebox
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8 posted 2004-10-07 09:19 AM


"I had always believed
the image of
walls coming down
would be
positive."


Yes.

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9 posted 2004-10-07 10:48 AM


I'm glad you were able to write this about such a sad situation.  Your friend is very lucky to have someone with such compassion.

Had I not known the situation, I would have flattered you about the dynamite contrast you showed walls to have. I won't do that because I know that wasn't your purpose.
Thanks for being you.
                    miscellanea

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10 posted 2004-10-07 11:38 AM


yes I know
Enchantress
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11 posted 2004-10-07 12:16 PM


...


Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2004-10-07 03:33 PM


Trust me on this.

There are some walls that should never come down least we don't survive what we see.



Very well done.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

James_A_Fraser
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13 posted 2004-10-07 10:04 PM


It can be positive...very much so.
/pip/Forum81/HTML/002744.html

And...what seems negative can turn positive again.



~~J

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14 posted 2004-10-08 09:13 AM


Nice job here Midnitesun, I think we all come from a place were the walls have wanted to, or have fallen down. Are they heroes in the next chapter of life or are we all when the time comes? Outstanding pen on paper here. Thanks.

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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15 posted 2004-10-08 09:36 AM


Thanks to each one of you for your reply, and James, for the link.
Wayne? yes, no doubt we all have a hero moment, maybe many such moments. A good point.

Mark Bohannan
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16 posted 2004-10-08 12:41 PM



"Ironically,
I had always believed
the image of
walls coming down
would be
positive."
****************

I know it is hard to see the positive, however, it is there.  Hidden maybe, but I do understand your thoughts on this.  Very nice piece and very touching.

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