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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2004-10-03 07:38 AM




I Had a DReam

I had a dream that made me weep
A million tears fell in my sleep
My child was hungry and in pain
And trembling lonely in the rain
And every soul just passed on by
They let him suffer, let him die

I see the pictures all the time
But this is different, this one’s mine
And I was frail,I could not fight
I could not save my child that night
For he was just a dream that fled
Across the shadows of my bed

When I awoke I felt the fears
Laid on my pillow, wet with tears
I ran to see my child in bed
And knelt beside his little head
Dear Lord, please bless this child tonight
For what I’ve seen has caused me fright

I had a dream, dearLord, a dream
It was more real than it would seem
I saw my child down in the street
Deprived of care by passing feet
His eyes were sunken, lips were dry
He had no teardrops left to cry

The Lord said, “Look back on your dream
Review the faces in the scene”
The child was just a stranger’s son
He was not yours, this little one
The feet that passed him by unknown
They were the footsteps of your own

He was not mine? this precious child?
He was a stranger’s all the while?
How wretched is a soul as I
Who cannot hear a stranger cry
Who would not heed a whimpering moan
If not a child of his own

A million tears fell in my sleep
I had a dream that made me weep

Elizabeth Santos
Oct 2, 2003

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2004-10-03 08:25 AM


Elizabeth,
A very special poem from a very special lady. Excellence need no praise. Love Sy

ice
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2 posted 2004-10-03 08:43 AM


Elizabeth, I am
Applauding this, even with its pain
Such a nightmarish dream;
Thoughts of a nurturer, expressed well
For all to see...

The worlds children belong to that "all",
Weeping for these helpless ones, displayed
In word creations, well done art arranged
In a sad poetic theme..



Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

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3 posted 2004-10-03 08:48 AM


DearestElizabeth~
This touches my tender ... and stays there~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Martie
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4 posted 2004-10-03 10:36 AM


Liz

I have to agree with Sy.  How tender is your heart and pen.  

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5 posted 2004-10-03 11:28 PM


A lovely compassionate poem.  Love, Joyce
Rick
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6 posted 2004-10-04 07:51 AM


Dear Elizabeth, this was so touching, though sad, you have a gift which touches my heart and warms it for such a while, a wonderful work here dear friend, thank you so much for sharing.

Sincerely
Rick

LeeJ
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7 posted 2004-10-04 07:59 AM


Hi Liz and Good Morning
This was written as tenderly as your heart
That Child is all of ours...to nurture and see to it, that all is well....this one, I believe is one of my favs of yours, although all of yours are magic
Thank you sweep poetess for your wisdom

Luv and hugs
Me

icebox
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8 posted 2004-10-04 09:31 AM


"It was more real than it would seem"

You state the greatest grief.

Thank you.

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9 posted 2004-10-04 09:36 AM


Wonderful tender write dear Liz.
Heart hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

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10 posted 2004-10-04 09:37 AM


Some tears burn like acid, etching the soul as they come....but some tears heal, though the healing may be like that of a tree that's been struck by lightning. It is never the same, yet still a green and growing thing. I think your tears are this kind, though oaks grow slowly.

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11 posted 2004-10-04 10:40 AM


liked this read a lot
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12 posted 2004-10-04 01:21 PM


quote:
How wretched is a soul as I
Who cannot hear a stranger cry
Who would not heed a whimpering moan
If not a child of his own
Unfortunatley this happens all to much in real life every single day.  Nice lesson in this poem m'friend.

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13 posted 2004-10-04 02:01 PM


Elizabeth,
   Thanks for sharing your dream and its wisdom.  It's so well written and very touching.
             miscellanea

Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 2004-10-04 05:52 PM



  I am truly grteful for all the wonderful responses to this poem. Thank you passionate poets, passionate about life
Liz

Mark Bohannan
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15 posted 2004-10-04 11:39 PM


Sometimes it takes a dream to wake us up, even when we are awake.  This is not only wonderful in it's poetic value, but also in it's value as a life lesson learned.  Your writing has always been and continues to be smooth as silk, complete in it's draw, and visually, emotionally ...... superb.  Excellent indeed and so very nice to find one of yours.
JamesMichael
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16 posted 2004-10-05 12:31 PM


A wakeup dream...for us all...James
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