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Larry C
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0 posted 2004-09-30 10:41 PM



Just a Note
By Larry Chadwick
Mostly...

In a sense
it was our last time together,
at your graveside.

As we lowered you
into the ground
I pondered
the prospect
of leaving my heart
there with you.

Then it occurred to me
that you were done
with yours and so
I chose to keep mine
and take yours
with me.

But I left for you
the flowers
because
they were from all
your friends
and family.

My flower
I dropped
a petal at a time
on your casket
to remind you
my heart
was broken.

But in taking your heart
I seem to have mended mine.

I thought
you should know.

September 30, 2004



If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.
© Copyright 2004 Larry Chadwick - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-09-30 10:45 PM


Oh, I am pretty sure she knows alright.  
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2 posted 2004-09-30 10:49 PM


Yes...she knows Larry.
Heart Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

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3 posted 2004-09-30 10:50 PM


talk about grabbing my heart
this has such a healing feeling to it
heart hugs, dear Larry

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4 posted 2004-09-30 11:18 PM


Poetry, this...
And of the best kind!

A VERY nice piece, sir


Ed

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5 posted 2004-10-01 12:36 PM



Just another note: this write does not represent my theology on death and dying. But it certainly represents my feelings.

Sharon,
Thank you for being there.

Nancy Lee,
Thank you and for the hugs too.

Kacy,
Thank you dear.

Ed,
Tall compliments that I genuinely appreciate on this very personal write. Thank you.


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6 posted 2004-10-01 12:43 PM


Thank you so much for posting this... I'm sure it was hard. Your strength and love for her shine through in every word. I only wish that having written this meant the pain was less, but I know how the hearts melding leaves a scar and a constant, painful, ache. This write? It aches.


Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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7 posted 2004-10-01 12:47 PM


Alyssa,
You are the best. You are always so sensitive and kind. You hae a healing touch. Thank you. Last weekend I heard a passing remark from somebody, I don't know who, about leaving their heart at the grave. But it didn't work for me though it sparked some good thoughts and deeper emotions. Bless you for noticing the nuances. And this really doesn't represent my theology, only my feelings.

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8 posted 2004-10-01 01:10 AM


Larry this is so soft and tender...a beautiful silky flow of love...James
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9 posted 2004-10-01 01:14 AM


Must be extremely hard to have lost a loved  one Larry, I'm sure she appreciates your gestures


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10 posted 2004-10-01 02:16 AM


Aw Larry, this is so sweet and so heartfelt, and I'm sure she knows

and then He created the horse...

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11 posted 2004-10-01 03:47 AM


I have no doubt the knowledge came across even without a word being said.  Tender, loving, and complete.
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12 posted 2004-10-01 05:11 AM


know the feeling Larry, although for a sister...

in 5 days she would have turned 62.. only three months have passed and when I visit
it doesn't get easier...especially  since the ground is still not settled and only a plastic marker is there for now.

Larry, we(in our family)leave behind a stone
to show we were there...mine, these beautiful river stones...others with words like love, hugs and missing you from family members and friends and arrowheads from those who knew and loved her from her many years in  boyscouting...same as flowers only they  remain  ( just a bit of info)

enjoyed your thoughts...

M

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13 posted 2004-10-01 12:47 PM


This one made me cry.  I don't suppose that surprises you, but I thought you should know.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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14 posted 2004-10-01 01:03 PM


How utterly honest and giving...realistically knowing, that she not only knows, but would have wanted it that way for you...When you love someone, you wish them further prosperity....

Beautifully written and felt, thanks so much for sharing

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15 posted 2004-10-01 02:38 PM


This is a beautiful story of a parting that is never wanted.  Thank you for telling us.  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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16 posted 2004-10-01 03:04 PM


Writing is a healing balm to the tender heart. You hear a words spoken or you see someone do something that touches your mind and heart in the most tender of ways.
This is aching poem filled with loving tenderness.
Thank you for sharing
BonBon

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17 posted 2004-10-01 04:54 PM


Larry

"But in taking your heart
I seem to have mended mine."




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18 posted 2004-10-02 12:10 PM


James,
Thank you for that.

Thanks Martin,
Hardest thing I've ever done.

Thank you Rhonda, you are appreciated.

Mark,
Well now, that was indeed kind, thanks.

M,
I like it when you share. And that is a neat tradition. And I am sorry for your loss. Peace and thank you.


If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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19 posted 2004-10-02 12:14 PM


Aw Nan, sorry for your tears but you comforted me nicely, thank you. And I'm glad to know.


Oh thank you Lee. Very kind and much appreciated.


Ken,
You're welcome it helped me a lot. Glad you apprecaited too. Thank you.

Bonnie,
So true, so true. Thank you.

Martie,
Yup I know too.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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20 posted 2004-10-02 09:00 PM


"My flower
I dropped
a petal at a time
on your casket
to remind you
my heart
was broken."

oh I just have no words worthy of this...

Larry C
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21 posted 2004-10-03 12:03 PM


Thanks Susan, it's nice to know...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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22 posted 2004-10-03 04:43 PM


Larry~
These tears flow ... but they should ... for that is what remembering is all about~
I've come to believe that our tears fall to dilute the sorrow~

Beautifully moving is this~
Touching the core of me this day~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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23 posted 2004-10-04 12:17 PM


Marge,
Tears cleanse our sorrow, our anger and even our frustration. But mostly they renew us... And thank you for your tender understanding.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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