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Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
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Far from where I am going

0 posted 2004-09-29 11:25 PM


Clouds burst out
from a September sky
with water spouts of a natural sense
drenching all underneath
in a half-second splendor.
rivers of loose top soil
ran reckless from grass blades
and blended with asphalt.
leaves weighted down
with splendid glass drops
shimmering in the emerging light
hang and plunge to the landscape.
an arc of multicolor
tears through a low hanging sky
giving hope to a distraught undercovering.
soles make a way
across overhydrated asphalt
unconsiously and unknowingly
plunges through a mini lake
soaking and sabotaging a foot covering
a beautiful occurance
has become in split second deviance
destructive

nice use of muffin

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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
1 posted 2004-10-01 08:48 PM


This got by unattended...and I'm so glad that I found it.
A perfect rendering of the lake effect weather...
Footwear dries faster than the tears of God.
Wonderful!
TD

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Gaia
2 posted 2004-10-01 09:31 PM


Makes me want to go splash in a big puddle! but it's dry here today.
Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
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Far from where I am going
3 posted 2004-10-01 10:58 PM


Thank you both for the comments. I'm glad that someone had a keen eye and caught this before it slipped through the cracks

nice use of muffin

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