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klm
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0 posted 2004-09-28 07:00 PM


In one bed three wept
while at their door he slept,      

Two youths and mother
all clutching covers,      

For letters they'd found
on eve's gray ground,      

That told the story
of ruined glory --      

Their husband, father
loved another.

The true poet writes to express, not impress.

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Lane - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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1 posted 2004-09-28 07:16 PM


What else do you say

Who denied love because love was there for him to forgo love

Dave

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2 posted 2004-10-03 01:15 PM


Kenneth~
I heard these words weep~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Margherita
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3 posted 2004-10-03 02:22 PM


This hurts.

A sad reality rendered powerfully.

Love, Margherita

Susan
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4 posted 2004-10-04 01:36 AM


Simple, yet straight to the heart as an arrow -

Susan

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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2004-10-04 05:38 AM


this is sad, but I believe people are capable of loving more than one person at a time - I know, I do....
Alicia
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6 posted 2004-10-05 11:59 AM


gosh, i can't seem to get that title out of my head after reading it sometime yesterday, it's good (as is this piece).
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7 posted 2004-10-05 04:40 PM


sad but good


Robert Joseph
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8 posted 2004-10-05 04:56 PM


In brevity...you speak volumes of life.
Stinging work!

Robert Joseph

klm
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9 posted 2004-10-05 05:15 PM


thank you all very much.

The true poet writes to express, not impress.

Robert Frazier
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10 posted 2004-10-05 05:33 PM


Straight to the terrible truth . . . sad, truly sad.

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Paula Finn
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12 posted 2004-10-07 01:36 PM


You could have been writing my life here...
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13 posted 2004-10-07 01:39 PM


WOW!!  You are so good in your brevity!
Powerful images.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

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14 posted 2004-10-07 01:49 PM


I love brevity in poetry, it shows just how much can be said with so few words.
You have mastered this quite well.
Enjoyed your crafting very much.

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15 posted 2004-10-07 03:02 PM


Everyone has already said what I'd say, but I'll be redundant!  Enjoyed the brevity and its strength!  
              miscellanea

klm
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16 posted 2004-10-07 09:14 PM


for all of your kind comments, i am deeply grateful. thank you.

kenneth

The true poet writes to express, not impress.

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