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mysticpoe
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0 posted 2004-09-28 04:28 PM



Did you allow?
The wet and weltered surface
of that sacred stone.
Found within the dreams of your imagination
to be dulled and clawed? At the boundaries
of what you really feel?
It’ll bring you to the edge
of your daily confusion.
Where wet-ness drowns
the freedoms of the openings and
your wonderlands will lose the most.
Passion, you say,
once delivered in a box of sand.
This warmth, penetrating newly planted thoughts.
Until the darkness of universal convection;
connecting all.
Placing all into concrete forms of submissiveness.
Only to be baptized as wanderers,
in a society with the usual.
Which ones are they?
Wet and weltered,
their footprints constantly evaporate with no trace.
How will life remember, and
which door will lose?

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2004-09-28 06:42 PM


I'm going to have to think through this one some more. But for some reason, it's ringing a bell for me.
Be back again later, with a hopefully-more-intelligent reply.

mysticpoe
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2 posted 2004-09-29 10:52 AM


Thank you Midnitesun, any response is a good one. Good to hear from you again, it's been awhile. Thanks again for stopping by!

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

littlewing
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3 posted 2004-09-29 12:40 PM


Wayne,

this brought to mind one who
wanders aimlessly through the
desert or their self/soul,
without faith.  
Moreso, questioning it.

Nice writing


LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-09-29 12:47 PM


reminding me of humankind, teater tootering on emotions, sometimes strong faith, sometimes less then confident and yet there awaiting is the passion that guides us, whether we know it or not, it's there knocking on our doors, even when we're not home.  

Tremendous write

Midnitesun
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5 posted 2004-09-29 01:19 PM


OK, so I came back, as threatened (promised)LOL.
I rarely watch TV, but do recall watching a couple of 'Stargate' episodes. This reminded me of that gate, a pathway to other dimensions of space and time. Also, a stepping stone, the kind with openings for small plants to sprout up through. LOL, I am in the process of creating my own garden stepping stone, which will feature some of my rock/bone/driftwood collections from Alaska and Oregon. Putting this together will hopefully fill a creative void I've been stuck in lately, and so, this write seems to fit somewhere within that realm of inspiration, offering many elements to ponder.
  THANKS, Wayne!  

wranx
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6 posted 2004-09-29 01:21 PM


You get better and better Wayne...
mysticpoe
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7 posted 2004-10-04 05:11 PM


Midnitesun, lw, Lee J and wranx. Thanks for the tremendous up-lifting responses. Great to hear from all you again. Sorry I'm a little late getting back.

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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