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klm
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since 2004-09-07
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New Orleans, Atlanta

0 posted 2004-09-27 09:22 PM


the weeping morning
awoke me
exposing
mutinous leaves
on naked limbs
coiled
with frayed strings
cooly snapped
by Autumn's waving kites.      


...a train blew
its only syllable
nearing
a near barren hill
of arched dandelions
coughing
their appeal
for squatter's rights
to Winter's deed
filed
in my concaved pillow
with unweaved dreams
of desert ice...    .,....

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Lane - All Rights Reserved
jwesley
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1 posted 2004-09-27 09:40 PM


enjoyed this read, my friend...jwesley
Temptress
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2 posted 2004-09-28 02:15 AM


beautiful images here..
I can't believe this doesn't have more replies.

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All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill


klm
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New Orleans, Atlanta
3 posted 2004-09-28 05:36 AM


jwesley and temptress, thank you.

kenneth

The true poet writes to express, not impress.

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
4 posted 2004-09-28 09:20 AM


arched dandelions
coughing
their appeal


that's just an amazing line. i wish i thought of.

concaved pillow
with unweaved dreams


sort of goes along with my thoughts lastnight.
i really enjoyed this, kenneth.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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5 posted 2004-09-28 09:45 AM


very well done, and good use of words, thank you for sharing
Margherita
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Eternity
6 posted 2004-09-28 12:35 PM


a near barren hill
of arched dandelions
coughing
their appeal


Poetry at its best.

Love, Margherita

klm
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since 2004-09-07
Posts 58
New Orleans, Atlanta
7 posted 2004-09-28 02:40 PM


snow (you know), Lee J & Margherita, thank you all also.

kenneth

The true poet writes to express, not impress.

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