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Martie
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0 posted 2004-09-24 08:46 PM


Mornings come quickly now
before the crust of toast is gone
or the tea cooled
the sky drinks me with perfect blue

Nights I understand the missing of summer
for in the dark cool crunch of autumn      
I cannot lie naked under windows
my legs loose and uncovered
first the sheet creeps up and I cuddle it
wanting more
I blanket my breasts

I feel you blow the steam within your cup
and look up with questions in your eyes
about           oh about why
why do we need the change to happen
and the blast of air  

I know what you are asking  you think time isn’t fair
because it takes things
and makes something else
sometimes it makes grief    I fear grief too
and not just because of you  

But I love a storm and change of current on my skin

Sound the thunder     I am drowning in sun
let me rain all over you
until your eyes listen and finally
you say
enough

Maybe then you will know why
is just because

© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-09-24 09:04 PM


How well I have known the battling of change, and the refreshment of the new transformation. This is perfect Marti.
TD

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2 posted 2004-09-24 09:06 PM


Electric in the vision and passion

Dave

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3 posted 2004-09-24 09:16 PM


Martie~

what a beautiful serene picture this paints...

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
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4 posted 2004-09-25 12:14 PM


Stunning....this is simply superb, Martie. I love it!

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5 posted 2004-09-25 01:02 AM


a soul tingling write, Martie

sending soft candled thoughts your way

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6 posted 2004-09-25 01:08 AM


as much as an

I do...

and then?

so much more...so much more...

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7 posted 2004-09-25 03:13 AM


Maybe then you will know why
is just because

Simply wonderful, Martie.  

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8 posted 2004-09-25 06:25 AM


Very human in scene and thought, M.....
Season inspired emotions...enjoyed
--------ice/ford
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9 posted 2004-09-25 06:32 AM


Mornings come quickly now
before the crust of toast is gone
or the tea cooled
the sky drinks me with perfect blue

Love this.  It made me smile and sigh at the same time.  Loved the entire piece -

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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10 posted 2004-09-25 08:19 AM


"I feel you blow the steam within your cup
and look up with questions in your eyes
about           oh about why
why do we need the change to happen
and the blast of air"
Some reasons for change we understand, but some we just don't and never will.
I find your change of season cloaks a change much deeper.  Ken  

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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11 posted 2004-09-25 08:31 AM


a perfect ending to a perfect write

I do love a good storm too, that's why I stayed during Ivan, but now...I can do without the feeling and will leave north when the next one comes

I love these cool nights and early mornings

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12 posted 2004-09-25 08:35 AM


Martie
Yes just because.

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13 posted 2004-09-25 10:14 AM


MartieSis~
And I find that I love it ... just because~
*sighs* fall gently~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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14 posted 2004-09-25 12:48 PM


But I love a storm and change of current on my skin

Sound the thunder     I am drowning in sun
let me rain all over you
until your eyes listen and finally
you say
enough

------------------------
No one loves a storm as much as I do but I just have this feeling that your storm would be extra vibrant in it's glow of clash.  Beautiful images and superb writing as always.  No wonder you hold the capture in amaze so well.

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15 posted 2004-09-25 12:51 PM


tres bien... you do have a way with words.
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16 posted 2004-09-25 01:53 PM


J'ai cintré à votre métier
     From The Canuck

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17 posted 2004-09-25 07:14 PM


Martie, this is absolutely incredible... I wish I had written this.

you're amazing beautiful friend



Maree

Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks

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18 posted 2004-09-25 11:49 PM


Ya know...

...you really are a poet!

*smile*

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19 posted 2004-09-29 09:15 PM


poignant - stunning - powerful - amazing - insightful - well I could go on a lot long on all the wonderful attributes of this terrific poem -you say lots and say it oh so very well - Paul
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20 posted 2004-09-30 05:57 AM


Sound the thunder     I am drowning in sun
let me rain all over you
until your eyes listen and finally
you say
enough
   This is good for the soul. Greatly enjoyed!

        Robert Joseph

        

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21 posted 2004-09-30 06:43 AM


ohhh girl, this was absolutely beautiful...each word of every line was incredible.  I do so enjoy your work, and the ending was brilliant, in more ways then one...

Upon the coming of a storm, I so enjoy watching it from beginning to end...the light show sometimes is beyond words....when the wind blows hard, the rain looks like phantom white sheets floating...nature is awesome and so are your poems.

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