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Susan
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walking the surreal

0 posted 2004-09-23 01:25 AM


The waltz went on through starlit night
Two souls blending to become one
Time slipped silently through the hour glass
Until the sands prompted the return of the Sun

In the twilight of magic just before the dawn
As the spell woven began to pale
Two lovers paused, holding hearts in hand
Wishing ever in this fantasy to dwell

Yet as is true, all stories must end
And this one bears no change
The sun arose to light the land
And the enchantment then did fade

The squire stood now in light of day
The meadow quiet and still
The phantom cast of his lady love
Had faded, forsaking him to the chill

He wrapped his cloak tighter about
And donned his hat upon his head
And in sorrows shade he left the lea
To return to his lonely path tread

I hear you sigh, I hear your moan
How can a tale have such an end
Never fear my companions dear
Once more, I bid your attention lend

For when the squire returned to home
You must note to his great surprise
There upon his front porch step
A true beauty caught his eye

She stood most fair, a lovely sight
With chestnut locks aglow
And a violet gaze most innocent
And soft full lips of red red rose

How she came to be there then
Is another tale, someday perhaps I’ll share
But know this now, my dearest friends
‘Twas surely the fairy folk most fair

Always believe in impossibilities
In enchantment and dreams come true
Now here we go, the fire’s grown cold
And it’s time to bid you adieu

s.a.t.


Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

© Copyright 2004 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2004-09-23 08:08 AM


So full of grace, dear Susan. I enjoyed this series much and the happy end you provided is perfect!

Your poetic flow is quite luminous!

Love, Margherita

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-09-23 08:33 AM


You are either an inherent story teller, or Magnus has given you some wonderful inspiration to go by...I enjoyed each part!
LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-09-23 08:54 AM


this was not only written with great passion and belief, but so inspirational that I'm beaming from ear to ear...such a lovely story dear lady...
Susan
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walking the surreal
4 posted 2004-09-23 10:18 AM


Thank you all - most kind.  Sunshine, I credit Barry with the idea of a poem broken into parts and of course he is a master of the story telling, so he is an inspiration to me, I can get lost in his works.  I have, however, written stories, though not in a poetic form, for many years previously.  So perhaps his magic has rubbed off on me and I once again can spin a tale  

I'm happy you all enjoyed this, it was fun to write.

Hugs -   Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Ericc
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5 posted 2004-09-23 01:59 PM


Wonderful, flowing writing....beautiful Susan!

Eric

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6 posted 2004-09-23 02:14 PM


Susan, I am sitting here smiling at the beauty of your tale.
wonderful...

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Susan
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walking the surreal
7 posted 2004-09-23 02:18 PM


Thank you Eric and Donna - smiling back at you

Hugs -  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2004-09-23 08:11 PM


Enjoyed...James
ShiningWindHaze
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9 posted 2004-09-24 12:01 PM


Your work always touches me.
Susan
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walking the surreal
10 posted 2004-09-24 10:41 PM


James - glad you enjoyed.

Haze - you warm my heart.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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