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LeeJ
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0 posted 2004-09-22 08:50 AM


Moorish rose, releases planets
Upon a coast of formed motion
Wearing goulashes wanting to
Return to the warming trends
Of naked spring country

Teaching an art of poetry to three voices
But…
Singing autumn crickets, climb night walls
Becoming the heretics with letters of
Quiet words from a dying woman
Breaking the sound barrier

Snow watcher songs with white tracks
Passing out progress in a cabbage patch
Chapbook of drunken moods by her side
She’s in and out
Painting like Michelangelo, from memory
Names on the road, sometimes blurred
But none-the-less, there with her

December hatchlings resolve a prophecy
Serving a departure breakfast
A sacrament of reality to
A passing beauty
Four days without food sets in motion
Preparation for the hesitant soul
She’s unafraid, yet reluctant to enter
This new ballad, prepared by
Far away islands with good hearts of stone

White lotus curves this infant for the other side
It is the last days, offering peace signs
To photographs left behind, where her
Colors were a breath of spring
A veil of perfume will linger by a lake
Of siblings, friends & children

Celebration of age, to a small girl sleeping
Awaiting the dream swallows of homage
Transcending with a calligrapher of parting love
She sleeps with Gods & Goddess’s fixated gaze
Her manuscripts adrift in the wind
Occasionally she wakes, but returns to them

Now dripping with extraterrestrial meanings
And overtures of partial correspondence
Still a writer at work with her shadow twin
In the natural amphitheatre of life

There is a purpose in every second
Where love songs threaten even old men
Awakening the frozen dogs of windows
Tiptoeing towards the other side of a patio
Like something tugging on a line
Viewing some untouched land from the air

Faint seepage toward a distance tree
Telling of the chief of human faculty
Promised arching beyond sunset and dawn
There is where she will recognize mortal flesh
With divine patience

From crossing to crossing
Woman who shared open fruit in endlessness
Now...
Abundant, weightless spirit unto her tongue
A mysterious fuel speaking to the mind
Looking at sounds of the sea from a child’s eye
And perhaps, the poet’s choice?

Her earth will remain young…mortal words monumental
In all seasons of life
In the cricket songs of autumn, finding the tropic islands
Of the guide dancers, in a place of time at heart’s end….
And soul’s beginning
Fair well my full-grown friend
Remember, if you can, I love you

© Copyright 2004 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-09-22 09:10 AM


Her earth will remain young…mortal words monumental
In all seasons of life
In the cricket songs of autumn, finding the tropic islands
Of the guide dancers, in a place of time at heart’s end….
And soul’s beginning
Fair well my full-grown friend
Remember, if you can, I love you


Oh Lee.....this leaves me in a whisper....
so loving and beautiful and brave....
it tugs my heart strings...

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
2 posted 2004-09-22 09:18 AM


White lotus curves this infant for the other side
It is the last days, offering peace signs
To photographs left behind, where her
Colors were a breath of spring


so pretty, Lee

M

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
3 posted 2004-09-22 11:38 AM


Now dripping with extraterrestrial meanings
And overtures of partial correspondence
Still a writer at work with her shadow twin
In the natural amphitheatre of life



There are many many lines in this incredible work that touched me powerfully, just choose the above because it's really extraordinary.

Your poems, dear Lee, have a special SOUND accompanying them and I listen to it with great pleasure.

Love, Margherita

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4 posted 2004-09-22 11:42 AM


Lee~
I felt the seeping of weeping in this piece of your heart~
So sadly beautiful it is~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Robert Frazier
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5 posted 2004-09-22 12:23 PM


There's so much to like about this poem, even with it's stylish complexities.  I saved this gem: "Where love songs threaten even old men".  That's rich!

Rf

Martie
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California
6 posted 2004-09-22 01:32 PM


There is so much richness in this, LeeJ....you are amazing, my friend!  
froggy
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Michigan
7 posted 2004-09-23 11:59 AM


I agree with the others on this one LeeJ.


:-)

Ericc
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8 posted 2004-09-23 01:57 PM


I love your writing....and this is why.

Eric

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9 posted 2004-09-23 08:09 PM


how beautiful
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