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Forget-You-Not
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Forget-You-Not |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571
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There must be something in my eye Something I cannot make out this view Something Destructs it's path of light to shine through Something It's so hard, I cannot tell Something It's your face... And down my heart F E L L |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
It was a sweet style. It inspired me to try new things. Creative. It made me think of how life has unexpected turns and how we can easily become confused. - Haze |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
There is something sad about this. It feels as though you are trying to make a break through, but there's this obstacle ahead of you. And, it's him......  _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Thanks for the commets. This one could be thought of in two ways... 1)You can't move on because this person (or their memory) keeps holding you back. and 2)A memory of this person is one that you love above all things and you're starting to forget this memory. This person's face grows more blurry each day... and when you realize that you're forgettig something you loved SO much it makes you go into this saddened depression. *Allison* ~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
When I was reading this poem, I envisioned it the second way you mentioned. I can relate to this poem a lot, plus I liked the creative style you used at the end.  By the way, I like your name...I'm an Allison too...lol...  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I too feel the poem speaks with the second explaination- how sad. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Allison~ Renewing the memories with a word-walk is a nice way to make sure you never forget~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
And down my heart F E L L I could feel my heart falling as well with this creative and effective ending! Love & Light, EA |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Either way you take it, it's a sad and powerful poem. Well done, Allison!  ~sky So you go and make it happen |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Thanks a lot for the replys guys! This one falls pretty closely to my heart. I'm glad you all liked it. And to Alli... power to the Allisons!!!! I spell mine Allie though... it used to be Ali but I changed it because it made no sense. LoL. Thanks a lot again guys. *Allison* ~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~ |
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