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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-09-18 09:40 AM


Once upon a time we did
walked into a garden hid
behind a neon light of brand
and left our footprints soft in sand
where only daisies dared to bloom
and I left angelprints by moon
of impress of my duress,
caress, I opened self
to you
in my glories petal pink
blushing corals
melding wrought
iron thoughts
I bought the park
branding grasses
lent in dark
weeping passion
branches bent
and daisies cried
as I relent
myself unto the gods
that sighed
dawning
that new day
we died
burnt by beauty
in the dawn.

Once upon a time we did...

we made the daisies smile.



© Copyright 2004 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2004-09-18 09:46 AM


serenity
To me, to me, LOL forgive me,I can't remember the time. A delight to read.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2004-09-18 09:49 AM


I still know the way...

*battin' eyelashes*

sweets...



and I get a kiss too, you!

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
3 posted 2004-09-18 09:54 AM


made me smile too...beautiful just beautiful
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2004-09-18 10:06 AM


I wanted to kiss Helen before I creep off to the crypt...grin.





love ya ladyslick

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
5 posted 2004-09-18 10:10 AM


love you right back...h
Sunshine
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6 posted 2004-09-18 10:14 AM


and left our footprints soft in sand
where only daisies dared to bloom
and I left angelprints by moon

~*~

One of your softer sides...
singing this, I am,
to the daisies...

Martie
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California
7 posted 2004-09-18 10:56 AM


You're a wonder, my friend, not just an ordinary flower either.  So enjoyed this playful!  
miscellanea
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8 posted 2004-09-18 11:29 AM


Serenity,
   This was a fun read filled with quality, as always. (I think I've been to that place before!) Enjoyed,
            miscellanea

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
9 posted 2004-09-18 11:40 AM


This daisy side of you is especially endearing.

"to you" I give a warm hug and smile.

EA

Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2004-09-18 11:45 AM


nice bloomin write
you are a one-of-a-kind daisy

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
11 posted 2004-09-18 01:49 PM


You are a daisy picked straight from Serenity's Garden..
Lovely this...lovely you...
A keeper for sure.
Love ya lady~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2004-09-18 04:21 PM


Have I told you I love you? No I mean, really love you.

This is beautiful.. YOU are beautiful.

It's a



M

Well I see you doing...What I try to do for me....With the words from a poet...
And a voice from a choir...And a melody... nothing else matters
~Ste

littlewing
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13 posted 2004-09-19 02:58 PM


K?

you know I always have such a twisted interpretation of things, but My God I instantly saw a spiritual thing goin' on here.  It made me think of God, at one time, having faith - walking (footprints), believing . . . (to you -->> to Him). . . in a non-sexual sense, of course.  But a loving sense,of completely giving one's entire self to another.  

It is absolutely beautiful,
as is your heart . . .

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
14 posted 2004-09-19 03:06 PM


Flowers are a thing of beauty, and an expression
that gladdens the heart and brightens our days.

But I kinda of wish he'd never sent them in the first place,
cause I knew in my heart, they were bound to die.

Anyway Serenity, you write so nice.

serenity blaze
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15 posted 2004-09-19 04:40 PM


smiling with the daisies here...there's a story behind this, and those I've been known to tell stories are welcome to e mail to find out.

Fraid it wouldn't pass forum decorum.



but thank you all for reading the romantic version...I have been trying to write "nice" for a change.


Margherita
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Eternity
16 posted 2004-09-19 05:55 PM


I love the rhythm in this write and for me ... there is enough to make the daisies smile .... and blush in pleasure.
Very nice.
Love, Margherita

kayjay
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17 posted 2004-09-19 06:50 PM


Between the lines a prospector
Finds dreams of love so deep.
But heartsickness is hidden too;
This was not written without weep.

This is lovely to read.  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
18 posted 2004-09-22 01:49 AM



smiling at you...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

iliana
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19 posted 2004-09-22 02:15 AM


Karen, though many memories fade...some never do.  You expressed this so very beautifully.   .....jo
icebox
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in the shadows
20 posted 2004-09-22 08:27 AM


"Once upon a time we did...

we made the daisies smile."

You still do this.

A great write!

Gentle Spirit
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21 posted 2004-09-22 08:30 AM


I believe the daisies smiled wider than they ever have before..I know I DID!  Gawd K, this is soulful beauty...of love that screams...unconditional....


YOU m'dear, have incredible talent!  AND a beautiful heart!  

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
22 posted 2004-09-22 02:18 PM


I opened self
to you
in my glories petal pink
blushing corals


only you could write this grins

..awed

serenity blaze
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23 posted 2004-09-22 02:36 PM


heh heh?



thank you all


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