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soul drifter
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0 posted 2004-09-18 01:51 AM


I Love September

Golden leaves and an orange school bus
I’ll always remember
the blue of your eyes in the sky above us
I love September

I love September
and I loved you all through
those dwindling days and nights
this love’s ember
glowing in the dark or in the light
warm, your lips
chilling, the wind
I love September
I love you

Maroon, my scarf hanging down
walking with her
glorious gold crumbling to brown
I love September

I love to remember
the scent of holding you near
the leaves in your auburn hair
the people scattered
gentlemen with their ladies fair
sweet, the time
heavenly, you were mine
I love September
and I love you

The faintest gray on the sky
this last time with you
trees and I release a sigh
this last warm embrace with you
I’ll keep with me to remember
through all of December
my love with you
May through September
I love September
it’s love ever after
I'll always remember your laughter
I'll always remember you.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

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ice
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1 posted 2004-09-18 04:46 AM


S.D.
The word bittersweet came to mind when I read this poem.....I like how your thoughts unravel as the poem moves along...your emotions well expressed...
enjoyed
--------ice
  ><>

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

Susan
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2 posted 2004-09-19 12:07 PM


I agree with ice, bittersweet - and beautifully expressed

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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3 posted 2004-09-19 05:13 PM


Bittersweet's a good word....I liked the combination of the September images and the love.

Nice work!!

~sky

So you go and make it happen
Do your best, just keep on laughing
It's all on you, there's always a brand new day. -Avril Lavigne

Martie
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4 posted 2004-09-19 05:26 PM


soul drifter

I love September too, for different reasons.  Enjoyed this!

Sunshine
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5 posted 2004-09-19 06:23 PM


This made me recall several very old September songs...
and for that, I thank you.

A Romantic Heart
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6 posted 2004-09-21 02:35 AM


The words flowed so well from your heart to your poetic pen,

Thousands of thoughts came to my mind,

I could hear Andy Williams(Whom I love) singing "Septembers Song" in the back ground.

A beautiful, Romantic Love story,
for a romantic time of the year!

~Love and Hugs
~ARH

Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely!


LeeJ
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7 posted 2004-09-21 07:44 AM


yes, we will forever love what gives us joy, and she is no acception, love truly lives deep within everything around us...even those cold winter months of ice and snow...love is gentle and mild, melting all winds that blow

Truely a gifted write, inspired by a gift

soul drifter
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8 posted 2004-09-21 05:25 PM


Thanks to all of you for the kind comments. I wrote this in September of last year, noting the gold and auburn color of the leaves on the big trees opposite of my apartment complex. This was actually influenced by the standard 'September Song', specifically Frank Sinatra's version on his reflective, melancholy September of My Years album. I wanted a crack at writing something sentimental and simple like the old standards of the his day and this was the result.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

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In Your Poetic Mind
9 posted 2004-09-22 11:18 PM


beauty lives within this

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

froggy
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10 posted 2004-09-23 12:10 PM


I Like it a lot.
I agree with everyone else on this one.
:-)

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