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LeeJ
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0 posted 2004-09-16 11:18 AM



His arms grew into a battle cry
Wretched men of whittled dreams
Grab bags of violent legacy
Conclusive
Cold aftermath meeting Sunday
Highlighter dribbling hope elsewhere
Hearing screams
When the doors close
Caught up in the encounter
Pinching my breasts
All bubble wrapped with no place to go
Dreaming of the Survivor Jackpot
Or part of a narrative with echo



© Copyright 2004 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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1 posted 2004-09-16 11:30 AM


Lee

I can hear the words.

I wont ever fully understand what it means since I would never suffer it.

Dave

Startime55
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2 posted 2004-09-16 11:37 AM


Oh my did you ever get this one right...well done...

LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-09-16 11:37 AM


Hi David and thank you for reading and commenting...your thoughts are appreciated

Here in Philadelphia, every year, early spring, they do a Race For The Cure...and every year, believe it or not, there are more and more men who come, who are survivors of Breast Cancer????
Believe it.


LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-09-16 11:38 AM


thank you Startime...wishing you a great day, it's nice to see you
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2004-09-16 11:56 AM


LeeJ
Interesting write, enjoyed.

DavePage
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6 posted 2004-09-16 11:57 AM


Thanks Lee but stomach, kidney, prostrate, bladder and all the other cancers tend to hit as well.

I just drink the red wine, eat the veg but the understanding or lack of it was rammed home via my wife's aunt who had the breast and nodes removed recently.

Early diagnosis, identification and treatment will give her some more years.


For me 70 years will do.

dave

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7 posted 2004-09-16 12:08 PM


Right/write on!!!!!

Perfect Lee!

Hearthugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Martie
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8 posted 2004-09-16 12:13 PM


LeeJ.......Understanding this one!  
miscellanea
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9 posted 2004-09-16 01:58 PM


Lee,
    Oh yes. Those mammograms can be a life saver.  I had to smile:
  When the doors close
  Caught up in the encounter
  Pinching my breasts
  All bubble wrapped with no place to go    
  Dreaming of the Survivor Jackpot
  Or part of a narrative with echo "

Enjoyed your work.  I think this is the shortest one I've seen you write, but I like it!
         miscellanea

Sunshine
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10 posted 2004-09-16 05:22 PM


Letters arrive
before a doctor's call...

"abnormal"..."please come in for a repeat examination..."

denial fights with fear,
the battle goes on...
phones dialed,
holds placed,
music drones,
fear begins to win that no one will win...

Nurse comes on..."it's just a spot,
nothing to worry about..."

[is it her body?]

"Come back in, in six months for a repeat checkup...don't worry..."

twice said, twice hit...

don't worry.

Time flies, but months drag.

inkedgoddess
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11 posted 2004-09-16 10:07 PM


havent had one in 5 years
a real nasty disease
dont even want to deal with that one

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2004-09-18 11:35 AM


Breast Cancer ~ the very thought of it sends shivers through my own! My grandmother died of it. It is my understanding that since she was my father's mother, it is less likely that I would contract breast cancer than if it had been my maternal grandmother.

Regardless of the genetics, we all are at some degree of risk by mere virtue of the fact that we are inundated with herbicides, pesticides, dyes, hormones, toxic waste...the death list goes on!

I hear ya, Lee! Your voice is always one I like to hear!

~ May your physical health be as healthy as is your mind!


Linda

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13 posted 2004-09-18 02:07 PM


So powerful.

Eric

jwesley
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14 posted 2004-09-18 02:31 PM


as usual, excellence in expression my friend, truthfully and uniquely written.

I want to grow up and write as you do...

jimmy

rascalx
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15 posted 2004-09-18 09:36 PM


While I can't identify exactly with your words (given my gender); as a healthcare worker for 14 years, I can definitely understand, appreciate and enjoy the sentiment and emotion of this piece. Very well done.
                             - Jeff

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16 posted 2004-09-19 12:40 PM


I've been there, not a pleasant experience though one with a happy ending....still it's different for a man I'm sure. The implications less threatening and less personal in important ways.

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17 posted 2004-09-20 02:42 PM


What a powerful write of truth... excellent work!
Margherita
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18 posted 2004-09-21 03:41 AM


Impressive write .... and it reminds me of the ongoing battle with my gynacologist! He is pro and I am contra. With all the doubts of course that rise in such cases!
Love, Margherita

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