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Carmel Sunset
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Carmel Sunset |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Carmel Sunset it opens here again the seam rends like these torn clouds that scatter the spun glass of sunset into shards of pink vermillion suddenly it shows the hidden of this shore where waves crack like whips over the prostrate sand time has no choice in this grains of it move as they are moved spirit wields ephemeral power comes to roil or seep among them though it can neither penetrate nor dissolve the fluid and the motes eternal each bound into this a changeless changeling their conflict muted in symbosis created and held forever steady as bronze the tablet opens into falling tide in testament of that invisible wind which carries random grains away and steals the mist wind driven onward by the heat of an eternal fire |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ This is just exquisite word-artistry~ I rolled through your thoughts and felt the all of it reach deeply into the core of me~ Belongs in my favorites list ... yes, it does~ I feel like I've just taken a trip to an art gallery and yet this was just waiting for me on these pages blue~ Thank you, thank you, thank you~ I am ever grateful that you are both poet and friend~  I would buy this ! *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, the spirit rejoices over what it has left. - Sufi epigram <))>< Email noles1@totcon.com |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You are a poet, my friend... but you are much more. *S* You're an artist... painting with you pen... giving us words that make us see... and hear... and allow us to share an incredible moment. *S* There are so many jaw-dropping lines in this... so many verses of wonder... and they merge into a whole that's beyond compare. This is one of those magical poems I didn't want to end. *S* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the tablet opens into falling tide in testament of that invisible wind which carries random grains away and steals the mist ~*~ Now if that doesn't bring it home nothing will! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang! This is such an amazing write! Very much enjoyed this one Ed... Love your style. Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed The inner landscape is beautiful, as you know. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"time has no choice in this grains of it move as they are moved" And so it goes... |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Ed, Really enjoyed this a lot. I'm wondering about the title. Is it Carmel, as in Carmel, California? I've never been there so I don't know the landscape and setting. If it is, my father told me of a vision he had there when he was young...Let me know. Or carmel, as the color and candy? ~miscellanea |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yep, Carmel, California.....we spent several days there and caught every sunset. One of those nights, the whole thing felt absolutely spiritual, and ever since then I've wanted to try to recreate that feeling in a poem. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This incredible write reached the depths of me when I first read it... but yesterday morning, as I was driving into the sunrise... and stopping to try to catch the magnificence on film... I really gained a new appreciation for what you have here... You've given us the scene so vividly that Kodak would be redundant... This, my friend, is poetry at its best! |
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