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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2004-09-14 02:51 AM


I get the drift of life’s flow
and how unperturbed it runs  
directly and determinedly
right to the very end.

No rock can bar the way
or stand up to the force
of unrelenting movements
towards extermination
of our once-upon-a-times.

Few and far is driftwood
that pauses on the bank
to feel again the wonder
of days spent in the sun
and bask in a re-run
of what once was
meaningful.

And even those lucky few
soon lose their desperate hold
as the inexhaustible
current of time
overpowers feebleness  
and returns unto itself
the power to decide
each and every fate.  

As a river wends its way
through mountains, valleys, dales,  
to finally arrive at the waiting sea
so each and every life force
dances little jigs
through prevailing circumstances,
people, and events,
until it’s merely vapour  
in an occasional thought
soon too to disappear
like a river into sea.

And there’s no river to be seen
in the hungry jaws of sea
by future generations
standing on the shore
and yet we’re all embroiled
in life’s amazing travesty
so passionately playing at
being meaningful.

Would that there could be
a re-appearance of thought forms
to tell the “whys” and “what fors”
of flowing speedily
towards a state of being ...
completely meaningless!


© Copyright 2004 Helen - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2004-09-14 07:00 AM


No rock can bar the way
or stand up to the force
of unrelenting movements
towards extermination
of our once-upon-a-times.
sighing~~

I was told I was a dreamer just the other day...I am not so sure whether that is a bad or good thing

But your words always have much to say between the lines

M

ice
Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
2 posted 2004-09-14 07:11 AM


A poem of "why go on, all leads to nothing".....Perhaps an event or just deep thought has urged you to write these words down? Do not misunderstand, I do like the poem....it is written well and I am one who believes that a poet should say what he or she feels, no holds barred...

I have no argument that is not faith based (for the most part) to desolve the solids, of this poems content...

The story line has moved me, and that shows the poem is successful

enjoyed
---------ice
  ><>

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
3 posted 2004-09-14 07:27 AM


Hi, Maureen - dream away.  It doesn't hurt any physical part of the anatomy.

Ice - Thanks for the read.  I have faith in an eventual purpose and reason for everything - it's just not evident in the here and the now where we presently all are.  I do very much appreciate your comment - thanks.  

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
4 posted 2004-09-14 01:18 PM


I can relate to this...

a moving write

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
5 posted 2004-09-14 02:04 PM



Your powerfully descriptive words flow swiftly in the torrential current of this poetically moving river ))))))))).....

This is not exactly what I'd call "going with the flow"! lol This flow is more like a forceful and all-consuming deluge that sweeps one away into the devouring jaws of a hungry and waiting sea! You sure know how to write, Dear Bunches of Honey!


EA


Ericc
Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

6 posted 2004-09-14 02:21 PM


Great write!

Eric

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
7 posted 2004-09-14 03:13 PM


Dixie - thanks so much for reading - for always reading.

EA - Wow - did I really write like that?  I do admit to having had a hearty laugh when reading your reply.  Thank you so much for that.

Eric - Thank you!

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