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soul drifter
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0 posted 2004-09-13 03:07 PM


Alright With Me

She has that plain kind of face
where it was hard to tell
if she was beautiful or not
and oh I’ll never forget her song
like the slow sad fade of the sun
drying on some desert canvas
under a warm ghostly moon
every time she walks by
she walks just like a queen
a queen with all the king’s wishes
and all the king’s men
eyes wondering up her dress
but she keeps her eyes fixed on me
her ex-boyfriend is the content of her poems
that’s alright with me, I guess
she is the content of my bed
made with red white and blue sheets
that cover her like the dawn on the land
she hugs the pillow and smiles
as bluebirds break the day open
she sings John Lennon songs
to Eminem beats
I don’t get her sometimes
but she’s alright with me
her hair is a dusk-colored wheat field
I get lost in her muddy New England eyes
and her skin against mine is heaven
and her hand on her hip is hell
and she stole my favorite Van Morrison CD
but that’s alright with me
she said she’ll buy me a copy sometime
wilting flowers and unexpected showers
music stores and the littered street life
hers is a heart that resembles a cookie jar
I’d really like to get my hand in
but it’ll have to wait
and that’s alright with me.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

© Copyright 2004 Zach Hilgefort - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-09-13 03:19 PM


oh............oh.......oh.........I do love this, what a picture you paint
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In Your Poetic Mind
2 posted 2004-09-13 03:34 PM


Zach~

this is fantastic!! what a way to express the longing and desire....if she doesnt give back your Van Morrison CD I have one I'll send ya...


I don’t want the world to see me
cause I don’t think that they’d understand
When everything’s made to be broken I just want you to know who I am

soul drifter
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3 posted 2004-09-13 04:49 PM


Heh, thanks. My favorite Van Morrison album is Astral Weeks. If anybody really did steal it, I'd go ballistic. Beautiful, poetic album.

This is actually one of the brighter, happier poems I've written, thoughI guess there really is an undercurrent of loneliness in it. Thank you for your kind words, everyone.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

gringakiwi
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4 posted 2004-09-13 11:56 PM


wow. it'd be alright with me if someone wrote something like this for me! I love it.
A Romantic Heart
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5 posted 2004-09-14 12:02 PM


Your words are "Danceing In The Moonlight"

And all the emotions are "Crazy Love"....

Liked your poem!
Love and hugs
~ARH

Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely!


Susan
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walking the surreal
6 posted 2004-09-14 12:25 PM


Enjoyed this - s'alright

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2004-09-14 12:39 PM


good stuff
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2004-09-14 07:44 PM


Applauding here in Pennsylvania....wow, this is an incredible write. I love the imagery and the entire concept of this piece. Well done!!!
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