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kaile
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0 posted 2004-09-11 01:02 PM


We were trading life stories
and I asked you
why you seem so anxious
to settle down

Your spontaneous, simple statement of
"Because i don't have a home"
rose above
the drone of unhappy voices
in the overcrowded food-court

Having underestimated
your twenty-years-of-age
and pigeon-holed your concerns
with fun, frivolous stuff,
I inhaled my breath sharply

and ached for
your astute insight on emptiness
and the volumes you left unspoken

for aaron

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EagleScorpion
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1 posted 2004-09-11 01:14 PM


being homeless isnt fun. its good to know you can count on somebody in your low times.
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2 posted 2004-09-11 02:00 PM


for some, homeless is what they want...free with no attachement or responsibility...it's all in the way it's told in the trading of the stories

life is hard for everyone

good write here kaile

Susan
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3 posted 2004-09-11 11:03 PM


'tis hard, this.  Sad.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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4 posted 2004-09-11 11:27 PM


a cool write, showing much insight on your part
so nice to read you again, kaile

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5 posted 2004-09-12 12:18 PM


Neat write.  I feel as if I were witnessing the conversation.
                 miscellanea

Larry C
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6 posted 2004-09-12 12:29 PM


Kaile,
You are a sensitive guy. I like that.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Mon Cherie
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7 posted 2004-09-13 11:28 AM


Oh look! You have your picture up, and I didn't know!

Well, looks like we should not stereotype the young ones these days. They have their own mindset, and needs.

"your astute insight on emptiness
and the volumes you left unspoken"
Yes, volumes were left unspoken, but astute insight? I'm not so sure about it.


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Florence

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