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Open Poetry #33

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klm
Member

since 2004-09-07

Posts 58
New Orleans, Atlanta

0 posted 2004-09-10 12:22 PM

my doll is just beyond my reach
on the floor 'neath my cradle's sheets.
it lays there frighten so it seems
i cannot hush its plastic screams.

my doll is frighten like i am
in our closet they keep so dim.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-09-10 12:39 PM

There is an eerie feeling to this write, one that speaks of a great loss, and a search for something/someone to comfort, to fill a void, to shine a light in the dark.
Hopefully, not a personal memory?
Well written imagery, anyway.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-09-10 12:39 PM

Wow, this one reaches right out and grabs your heart.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

3 posted 2004-09-10 01:59 AM

dont really know how to respond to this
interesting write

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-09-10 02:12 AM

haunting

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

5 posted 2004-09-10 07:22 PM

klm, I hope all is well with you. This is not an easy subject for most to comment on, but it was written quite well.

Enjoyed reading.

~tier

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